I spent years being able to describe a world and completely unable to describe a story.
Someone would ask what I was working on and I'd start with the ecology. Or the economy. Or — genuinely, more than once — the theology. I could feel it happening while it happened. There's a specific look people get about ninety seconds in, and I got very familiar with it.
What I eventually worked out is that nobody enters a world through a map. They enter through one concrete thing they can hold in their head, and the world arrives afterward, uninvited, on its own.
So now when someone asks, I don't describe the world at all. I describe a boy sealing a letter twice — once with the official stamp, once with his own thumbnail pressed into the wax beside it, because that's how his father sealed rope-bales. One press for the maker, one for the carrier.
That's it. That's the whole opening.
And the strange thing is that it does more work than the ecology ever did, because people lean in and start asking. Who's the boy. Why does it matter who made it. What happens if someone notices. Now they're building the world themselves, which is the only way anyone has ever actually loved one.
The world isn't the pitch. The world is what they find once they've decided to care.
I'm still bad at this, incidentally. The instinct to explain everything is not curable, only manageable.
So — a question for anyone here sitting on something big:
If someone gave you thirty seconds, and you weren't allowed to explain your world, what's the one thing you'd show them?
Not the logline. The object, the image, the moment. I'd like to see what this room is carrying.
Final Image in "The Shadowed": Hunter picks up a snow globe from a small table nearby and turns it over. As the glitter inside settles down onto the small replica of the school surrounded by little ev...
Expand commentFinal Image in "The Shadowed": Hunter picks up a snow globe from a small table nearby and turns it over. As the glitter inside settles down onto the small replica of the school surrounded by little evergreen trees Hunter sees the reflection of a coat rack behind him in the glass of the globe. A shadow behind the coat rack reflection turns to look at him. The shadow’s eyes glow red. Hunter smiles.
What it conveys: Hunter (who is 9) still holds onto the dark part of himself inherited from his father, the shadow demon, despite his mother's teachings that he can choose to be good. His mother fought the demon to save her son's soul but the darkness is always tempting.
At the beginning, José is always asking Sonia what to do. At the end, Sonia gives him an answer — and José chooses not to follow it. He simply closes the door, leaves the device behind, and walks into...
Expand commentAt the beginning, José is always asking Sonia what to do. At the end, Sonia gives him an answer — and José chooses not to follow it. He simply closes the door, leaves the device behind, and walks into the unknown without asking her what comes next.
That is something the José at the beginning could never have done.
As the Roman pardon dissolves into the dust at Golgotha, Titus finally discovers that the home stolen from him on earth has already been restored to him in Paradise.
What ending, it's just another beginning:
FADE TO BLACK and then to the stars as a shooting star flies across the night sky.
TITLE CARD: IT’S NOT THAT STRANGE
And then a slow burn in,
TO BE CONTINUED?
As a writer , I tend to think "The Ending will depend on what you where I want the reader or listener to go psychologically and or emotionally...or both. For example if I want to do a cliffhanger, ..t...
Expand commentAs a writer , I tend to think "The Ending will depend on what you where I want the reader or listener to go psychologically and or emotionally...or both. For example if I want to do a cliffhanger, ..then I write it to make the audience interested in what happens next. I might do a CLIFF HANGER: Scenario #1 The man walks into the room and discovers his significant other lying naked on the bed with his best friend. ... Scenario # 2 The judge is celebrating his 40th anniversary. The judge and his wife leave the restaurant walking happily hand and hand. But as the couple walk along the street, the psychopathic brother of the man the judge sentenced to life in prison two days ago is walking towards him and his wife. The judge doesn't recognize the crazy brother, but the audience does. The brother hides his face so the judge doesn't recognize him. The vengeful crazy brother allows the judge to pass him and then turns and starts to follow the judge and his wife from a safe distance.. But for example, if I want the audience to think differently, maybe that something has come to an end, then I might write it with an EMOTIONAL CATHARSIS...Scenario #3. Leonard a middle aged family man who has lost his three year old daughter in a freak boating accident has been struggling to deal with it emotionally. He has been drinking, brooding, fighting and tearing his and his family's life apart. Leonard needs to let go of his grief and his guilt, because if he can't, he will destroy himself and the rest of his family., so for the "letting go" scene maybe I'd write Leonard standing by a flowing stream next to a flowering bush. Leonard pulls a flower from the bush and places it on a hand-made wooden boat he made in his workshop during his grieving time. Then Leonard places the flower onto the hand-made wooden boat along with his late daughter's favorite soft toy, a polka dotted unicorn named "Cozy". Leonard then places the boat onto the stream and send the flower and Cozy both sailing it down the stream... and as the sun sets in the distance, the small boat drifts into down the stream becoming smaller and smaller until it disappears, as Leonard stands at the edge of the stream with tears in his eyes, to finally show, he has symbolically "left go" of his pain and his struggle. I think these are some of the ways you can deal with endings. Once I decided where I want to take my audience , I then think, what tools will I use to take them there. I have a number of tools I can use including Fear, Doubt, Rage, Revenge, Jealousy, Greed, Love, Confusion... all those things we have within our human experience.