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Sarah Zilker (40) arrives at Rumi Park torn. Behind her is home; a marriage of fifteen years with her husband Mark and her two sons Bruce (15) and Tyler (13). There is love, yes, but coldness, distance and silent vexations that have eroded their bonds over time. Before her is Rumi Park, and David Wills (33). They met here weeks ago by chance. Both attempting to escape a dreary sales conference across the street. An evening of walking and talking through fragrant darkness led to something. Love? Maybe. Lust? Most definitely. For Sarah, a bright light exploded inside of her at the possibility of meeting her soulmate. For David, a hope that someone would accept him for who he truly is. And for both, a kiss and a promise: to meet again one week later and pick up where they left off that night. So now, Sarah is here at the precipice. As she makes her way down the walking path in the cold light of an autumn day, memories tug her heart back and forth between the the life she has and the life she could have. Will she or won’t she?
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The idea itself isn’t entirely new, so it needs something that truly sets it apart—perhaps a unique way the characters meet, a physical deformity or limitation, or a compelling tragedy they must overcome. That’s one element I feel is currently missing—what is the emotional obstacle that drives the story? The AI-generated images are great for concept development, but the real heart of it lies in the emotions it stirs in your audience. Why would they want to watch this film? What will they feel?