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A man with a gambling addiction and close to death must chose between spending eternity gambling with Satan or give up his vices and go with the Almighty and a special someone.
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Satan Minded, is the story of a John a young man in his early early 20's with a heavy gambling addiction who has allowed evil minded thoughts to occupy his mind into a life of destruction. He suffers a mild heart attack which leads him to cross paths with perhaps a new romance named, Maria. While in a deep sleep, he slips into a nightmare only to discover his thirst for gambling has allowed himself to be lured into Satan's Under World Casino.
While still lingering into his own nightmare during the majority of the story, John owes the Casino a lot of money. And Satan and his own followers of Satan Enterprise, force John to remain in hell, until the balance he owes is paid in full. John meets The Almighty and some of his followers who plead with John to change his ways. John begs to show him a way out of his hellish nightmare, only to cross paths inside his nightmare with Maria, only to discover they both have allowed evil minded thoughts into the destruction of the life they have chosen.
In his desperate search out of his hellish nightmare, John rises up to the challenge of change. He knows he must curb his appetite of his heavy gambling addiction, if he is to have a loving relationship with Maria. And so he invites heavenly thoughts into own mind as well as some hard lessons in life to overcome.
The climax shows two girls competing to win John's heart. Will it be the one in the red dress or the one who inspired himself to change? Only one, if it's meant to be.
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I think that you could simplify the top a bit by instead saying something like "a terminally ill man with a gambling addiction". Also, how does this choice come up? Is he visited by Satan and the Almighty while he's at the casino? Does he have a vision in his sleep? And we'd like it to feel a bit more dire; it makes a tremendous difference to the audience when we say "he must choose" as opposed to "he is given the choice". Good start!
Adding to Angela's comment, I would say the way it's worded sounds like a win/win - what's the dark side of his choice?
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