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THE LEGEND OF THE TOYMAKER

THE LEGEND OF THE TOYMAKER
By Heidi Schussman

GENRE: Family, Adventure
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The gentle Toymaker must overcome the evil monsters who get their power from making children misbehave. (An epic tale about Santa Claus along the lines of Narnia.) A cinematic retelling of the L. Frank Baum original story of Santa Claus.

SYNOPSIS:

The Legend of The Toymaker is an epic Christmas tale adapted from The Adventures of Santa Claus, written by master story teller, L. Frank Baum in 1902. This legend has enthralled young and old for a century, but now we have finally arrived at a point in time when we can technologically handle the imagery on the big screen.

It starts when the Earth is yet young. A wee babe is abandoned at the edge of the enchanted forest of Burzee. Little Claus is adopted and reared in the forest among the immortal Nymphs, Fairies, Ryls, and Knooks. Soon, he reaches manhood and is taken by one of the three rulers of the world to observe the human race. Claus is awestruck by the experience. His heart is broken for the sad children who, to this point, had never known a toy.

Claus strikes out on his own… but not far. He builds his cabin at the edge of Burzee in the Laughing Valley where even the flowers, the brook, and the sunbeams sing for joy. Soon a path is worn by children’s feet to The Toymaker’s cabin. But trouble is brewing. The evil Awgwas, whose sole source of power comes from making children misbehave, are finding the happy children are now ignoring them.

A series of skirmishes follow as the Awgwas try to stop Claus from giving his gifts in the nearby villages. The immortals come to Claus’ rescue. The Awgwas bide their time. Claus is a mortal and will die eventually. And indeed, Claus is getting old. His giant white beard and long white hair finally come to rest upon his bed. The inhabitants of Burzee and Laughing Valley are silent as they mourn the coming loss of their friend.

The royalty of the immortals come together for a summit. They unanimously vote to lay the sacred Cloak of Immortality, the only one in existence, upon Claus. The next morning he bounds out of bed like a teenager. Immediately, he goes back to work making toys to be delivered by his trusty reindeer in his sled.

The Awgwas are infuriated and declare war. The delicate immortals of Burzee prepare for the fray. The battle is waged in The Laughing Valley… of course the immortals are victorious. Claus is free to spend the rest of eternity bringing joy to the children of the world.

The final dilemma is the rapidly growing human population. Claus is set back by a few modern inventions, like the stovepipe, but he perseveres. The final scenes are of Claus joyfully shouting from his sled, “In all this world there is nothing so beautiful as a happy child.”

THE LEGEND OF THE TOYMAKER

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William Gunn

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William Gunn

I Absolutely Love It! Frank Baum would be Proud!! I hope there's a Studio out there willing to take a chance on this wonderful adaptation.

Stephen Campbell

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Claude Gagne

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Claude Gagne

A Santa Claus movie all the children would love, even the much older ones like me. Good luck with your quest to have it made.

Nate Rymer

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Stephanie Munch

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Arthur Charpentier

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Tasha Lewis 2

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Heidi Schussman

Thank you William Gunn and Claude Gagne for your comments and thanks to Stephan Campbell, Stephanie Munich, and Arthur Charpentier for your five stars of encouragement.

Nathaniel Baker

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Heidi Schussman

Thanks Nathaniel!

Robin Gregory

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Nelda De La Paz

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Heidi Schussman

Robin and Nelda, Thanks so much for your rating!

Shanese Shields

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Kakha Beridze

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Heidi Schussman

Thank you Kakha :)

Abhijeet Aade

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Abhijeet Aade

Heidi Schussman Heidi, this is a beautifully imaginative and heartfelt concept with strong family and holiday appeal. The origin-story approach to Santa Claus, rooted in the work of L. Frank Baum, gives it both literary credibility and a timeless quality. The world-building is rich, and the emotional core bringing joy to children in contrast to forces that thrive on negativity is very effective.

The logline captures the essence, though it could be slightly more specific about the central conflict to sharpen the hook.

The synopsis is vivid and full of charm, with a clear sense of wonder and scale. The progression from Claus’s humble beginnings to a larger mythological battle works well, and the tone feels consistent with classic fantasy storytelling. Tightening a few sections and focusing on key turning points could improve flow without losing the magic.

Overall, a warm, cinematic, and emotionally resonant concept with strong potential as a family fantasy film, especially with its nostalgic yet epic storytelling approach.

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