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SHADOWS OF JUSTICE
By Hakim Kisakye
In a city mired in corruption and violence, a determined detective and a grieving family confront a ruthless crime lord and his deadly empire, uncovering dark secrets that threaten to destroy everything they hold dear.
SYNOPSIS:
In a vibrant university town shadowed by corruption and crime, chaos erupts during a wild party when a student is brutally murdered, revealing a dark underworld of drug trafficking and violence. Detective Tom and Muse are assigned to investigate the chilling crime, but as they dig deeper, they uncover a tangled web of deception, family secrets, and moral ambiguity that threatens to consume everyone involved.
Meanwhile, Frank, a respected university administrator with a sinister past, desperately tries to shield his family from the fallout of his criminal dealings. His carefully constructed facade begins to crack as police close in, revealing a history riddled with violence, betrayal, and moral compromise.
Amidst the chaos, young students and criminals navigate love, revenge, and survival — leading to daring confrontations, unthinkable violence, and moral dilemmas that blur the lines between justice and corruption. As the bodies pile up and the stakes rise, the detectives and families must confront their own secrets and choices to prevent the town from plunging into irreversible darkness.
Shadows of Justice is a gritty, visceral exploration of morality and redemption in a corrupt world — a tense, action-packed thriller that questions whether true justice is ever possible in the shadows of human nature.
SHADOWS OF JUSTICE
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Interesting and promising.
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What does "university finalized" mean, Hakim?
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Maurice vaughan, someone who has finished his university degree/ course, but not yet graduated, what do you have in mind.
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meaning graduand
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thanks a lot Maurice, you opened my mind. thanks a lot.
You're welcome, Hakim Kisakye. Glad the question helped.
I think your logline needs the inciting incident.
Here's a logline suggestion: "After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a graduand youth with his girlfriend and friends tentatively agree to cooperate and engage into risky police investigations against their psycho, criminal university registrar."
Or this one: "After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a graduand youth, his girlfriend, and his friends tentatively agree to cooperate and engage into risky police investigations against their psycho, criminal university registrar.”
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Maurice, you mean something like this: After a police set up and sexual harassment of his girlfriend, a graduand youth, his girlfriend, and friends tentatively agree to cooperate and engage into risky police investigations against their psycho, criminal university registrar.”
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Hi Hakim,
Your logline looks fine.
Scrolled through your screenplay fast.
Three small things focussing on format.
(1)
Front page:
a, underline title
b, delete the logline
c, delete the second mention of your name.
(2)
You have a spec script, so delete "continued" at the beginning and end of every page.
(3) In your scene headers use a period, like "INT." Not "INT:"
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Thanks Rutger Oosterhoff, I am going to do the need full, but for continued, I don't know how to do it, because I use celtx and automatically does it, but thanks I will check it's settings.
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Hakim, I used Celtx, if I am correct you go to "settings" and disable this option.
Hi Rutger, thanks again I have succeeded with all apart from underling the title, they rest are sorted, by my celtx provides not the option of underling the title.
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Sorry for the late reply, Hakim Kisakye. I just saw your comment. Your logline is better. I only have one tiny suggestion: change "engage into" to "engage in."
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Yes, celtx ( at least the free version) does not give you the oppertunity to underline the title. Very irritating!
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Thanks Maurice, your a D.
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You're welcome, Hakim Kisakye.
Maurice Vaughan, long time , I HAVE BEEN ABLE TO PRODUCE A FINAL DRAFT OF THIS SCRIPT AND A NEW MEANINGFULL LONG LINE AS WELL AS A BRIEF SYNOPSIS. WHAT DO YOU THINK?