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MY DAD'S FRIEND
By Hakim Kisakye

GENRE: Drama
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After an intelligent boy's parents are killed, he tries to raise his little sister and prove that his dad's well-known friend instigated the murders.

MY DAD'S FRIEND

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Nate Rymer

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Maurice Vaughan 5

Hey, Hakim Kisakye. This is an interesting concept, but I think your logline needs some work.

Here's a logline suggestion: "After an intelligent boy's parents are killed, he tries to raise his little sister and prove that his dad's well-known friend instigated the murders.”

I don't know the story, so "prove that his dad's well-known friend instigated the murders" could be wrong.

Matthew Parvin

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Hakim Kisakye

Maurice Vaughan thanks again, i will give it a check, but it a TV drama series/ novella in 30 min TV episodes.

Maurice Vaughan 5

You're welcome, Hakim Kisakye. You can use the feature script logline template for your overall series logline and episode loglines. I'm not sure if it'll work for novellas though. It might.

After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”

Hakim Kisakye

Thanks again Vaughan

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