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A female oceanographer and her team’s investigation of bizarre marine life protests of polluted
waters, turns deadly when they have to stop an illegal trawler crew from ensnaring the animals.
SYNOPSIS:
THE SIGN
Feature Animated Action-Adventure, Drama
A female oceanographer and her team’s investigation of bizarre marine life protests of polluted
waters, turns deadly when they have to stop an illegal trawler crew from ensnaring the animals.
INTRODUCTION
From global shores, oceans appear huge and beautiful, full of animal and plant life. But we cannot
see the massive amounts of trash that harms this ecosystem below the surface. My story focuses
on the marine life as it gets fed up with humans throwing trash into their home, and these angry
animals revolt. Despite it being animated, the animals are not anthropomorphic, heightening the
drama and very real threats.
WHY?
The pollution and extinction of marine life will have serious consequences for all life on our
planet. It will cause a catastrophic domino effect; as plant and animal species depend on each
other. The story is set in the Covid-19 period because at that time many plastic masks and gloves
were randomly disposed of and ended up in our waters. I want to raise public awareness about the
threats to Earth’s oceans and our planet. The ocean is a vital ecosystem for all life on our planet,
as it provides us with oxygen and has a very rich biodiversity. Action Groups like Greenpeace and
Sea Shepherd – who do their utmost to save threatened marine life, stop overfishing, and fight for
healthy oceans inspired me to explore these characters.
THE STORY
A war rages between marine life and junk that people have littered the ocean with. Their leader is
a Great White shark. Our protagonist, filmmaker and oceanographer, Mary Anne, calls Malcolm,
Captain of The Ocean Savior, with enough experience to be resentful. He is sailing with their other
two teammates, John, and Mark. John is a seasoned Scotsman with a wry sense of humor. Mark is a
newbie prone to worry and a short temper. Malcolm sees angry humpbacks heading for them and
escapes to pick up Mary Ann. The team sets out and their personalities are highlighted — clearly
there is history among Mary Ann and the more seasoned teammates that none of them are ready
to get into. Their silence on the water is suddenly interrupted as a united group of marine life
appears. They slap their tails on the water, make different sounds and perform maneuvers.
Malcolm presumes they are communicating with them.
The team tests the condition of the water to figure out why the animals are acting strangely, but
when Orcas emerge and unite with the other marine animals, instead of attacking them, it becomes
clear to the team that the animals are up to something as they encircle the boat and spit trash onto
the deck of the boat.
The massive Great White shark joins the marine life. Terrified, Mark pulls out a handgun to shoot
the shark. The shark becomes defensive and makes a sudden move to Mark. Mary Anne pulls him
back just in time. Malcolm confronts Mark for pulling a gun and in the argument the gun drops into
the water next to the shark. The shark attacks the boat, threatens the team and hurls the gun back
onto the deck. Mark brags about his father giving him the gun as a gift and reveals that his father
is a seasoned fisherman. Mary Anne takes charge to calm things and warms to Mark, she tries to
bring him around to others’ point of view, but doesn’t get through. Things go from bad to worse
when Mark secretly calls a fishing vessel to capture the Great White, but he soon regrets his action
when he realizes they are illegal trawler men.
The marine life defends and spits junk onto the deck of the illegal trawler, the angry crew assaults
them and lower illegal bottom trawls, to capture and kill them. Angry Orcas, and whales violently
attack the trawler crew.
Mark wants to fix his mistakes and he sneaks off the boat in order to free the marine life, despite
the shark infested waters and his little diving experience. John and Malcolm show little concern
for Mark, but Mary Anne is determined to make sure he is safe. Meanwhile, below the surface,
Mark tries desperately to free the trapped whales in the net, but gets entangled in abandoned
fishing gear. Mary Anne is on her way to him, while Malcolm tries to reach the Coast Guard about
the illegal trawler.
Mary Anne arrives to see that Mark is about to be attacked by Tiger shark. She signals at him
from a distance what to do. The shark fails to free the trapped marine animals and speeds away.
Mary Anne frees Mark from the fishing gear and films the trapped animals as evidence before she
and Mark get to work trying to free them and dodge the Great White and Tiger sharks in the
process. Mark’s father is revealed as one of the trawler men, and his ruthlessness reveals the
truth about Mark’s past as his father attacks him.
Malcolm and John cannot help because the marine life encircle Malcolm’s boat. Malcolm’s
frustration mounts as he cannot reach the Marine Police or the Coast Guard. The furious marine life
attack the illegal trawler — injuring several of its crew and prompting the rest to ready harpoons
and lower nets.
Mary Anne and Mark submerge again to cut the nets, but a big hole in the net shows that all of the
animals have escaped, except for a wounded dolphin. The Great White returns and recognizes
Mark. They are able to escape by shining their lights in its eyes. When they finally reach
Malcolm’s boat, Mark barely escapes the shark’s snout which bumps him. Mary Anne pulls him
out of the water just in time.
Finally, the police arrive and arrest the trawler men. The marine life breaks their formation. This
allows Mary Anne and the team to reach the wounded dolphin and bring it on board. The team
names the dolphin, Summer. Mark and Mary Anne treat it with great care. Although Mark does his
utmost to make amends, Malcolm is still mad at him.
The marine life blocks Malcolm’s boat again, because Summer is aboard. With the poor creature
running out of time, Malcolm contacts the Coast Guard for help transporting the ailing dolphin,
but the marine life blockade is everywhere. Mark gets the idea to put a microphone to her snout
to enable her to communicate with them. Mark’s plan works. The marine life follows Malcolm’s
boat to the Rescue Marine Center, where Summer is treated. The team watches the news report
about the marine life revolt taking place all over the world. When NASA shows images of the
protest, sent by space station ISS, it’s clear to all that the ocean’s animals have spoken.
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I love the idea of this, Leotien Parlevliet. I wonder if the logline needs to be clarified. In the present version, it reads as if revolting marine creatures are the antagonists,. Is that correct? If not, who is (are) they? For story's sake, can you make the antagonist and locale specific? Like location: the Great Pacific Garbage Patch? Antagonist: head of a plastic corporation? Toxic waste offender? Corrupt city garbage manager?
Sample idea:
"An eager team of oceanographers struggles to defend marine creatures in revolt against plastics corporation that litters the sea."Thanks for your comment, Robin Gregory. The logline will be clarified in the next rewrite. The Marine creatures are not the antagonist but the fishermen on the trawler. I currently rewrite the script.to make this more specific.
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The concept is confusing. I wish the marine animals are Bipedal anthropomorphic sea creatures (sharks, whales, dolphins, etc.) and then take revenge on greedy pollutionists, while the female oceanographer helps the animals to fight against the people who put trash or oil or barrels of toxic into the water. While her friends called her crazy and want nothing to do with the pollution war that just leaves only her and the marine animals to fight. That's the logline I would've use when it comes to animation green stories. The rest of "Your" logline and synopsis are confusing and not much happening for the character's goals whatsoever. Your concept should've leaves so much desire when it to going green and animations.