You might consider expanding this just a bit.

Hey Jay Gladwell thanks so much, can probably go another sentence at least.

Thanks Marcos Fizzotti for reading and rating my logline. It's my first real attempt at it.

Thanks Tasha Lewis 2 for reading my logline.

Thanks Neftali Rivera

Thanks Michael Dzurak

Thanks very much John Snell

Thanks John Branton

Thanks Kakha Beridze

Thanks Grant “Wiggy” Wiggins

No problem and wishing you all the best with the project.

I appreciate that, thanks Grant “Wiggy” Wiggins .

Wow thanks Sijun Cui

Thank you Mick

Thanks so much A.J

Thank you Marina Albert

Marie Hatten I truly love this theme and title, I think I would love this script, especially as an actress, I think the logline is almost there...almost almost...needs a bit of something...in the navigating bit, or in the end, what does she find, within or outside of herself maybe.

Wow that really resonates with me @Juliana tbh I thinks that’s one of the weak points in the script ( the ending for Emilia). Loglines are so hard , I’ll need to tweak it a little .

Wow thanks Rick Dumont

Thanks @Kevin Lenoble

Physical violence scares me, I hope your young woman is doing well, I really liked the logline.

Thanks so much @Koby Nguyen

Thanks @Anthony

Wow thank you @Deborah and @Oleg

What do you think about this:

“Trapped in a psychologically abusive marriage that turns violent, a young woman battles denial and fear while a female spirit urges her to confront the truth before her situation becomes fatal.“

The only thing I can’t glean from yours is who the protagonist is. We need one defining characteristic for her to shine. Something like “new mother”, “home trader”, “retired nurse” would give the reader a lot more to visualize.

Westley Cornwell that’s a much clearer take on it thank you . I don’t know that I need to state it in the logline but I want to capture the confusion created by coercive control tactics like gaslighting. I’ll need to think about the one defining characteristic for Emilia ( I think it’s interesting how evident it is that I don’t know her well enough as yet ).

No problem! I think the ‘psychological’ bit captures that, although it might not be the most effective.

"Great hook! The concept is very engaging and has a lot of potential. Looking forward to seeing how this develops. Keep up the good work!"

Thanks so much Vijay.

Hey Tony S. thanks for rating .

Thanks Nate Rymer and Ela Ilham Schoening