Thank you all for your thoughtful feedback and reviews. I'm glad the concept has resonated with so many of you.

If you're interested in exploring the project further, you can read the Cinematic Whitepaper by clicking "View Screenplay" or by using the link below:

https://www.stage32.com/sites/stage32.com/files/assets/screenplay/137182...

I'd love to hear your thoughts if you get a chance to read it.

- Seventy

Very interesting concept. It definitely deserves a chance, but I would think carefully about one important question.

A regular person finds a sword and suddenly gains superpowers. In cinema, when an ordinary person becomes a superhero, there is usually a strong reason behind it. Take Superman, for example. Even though Clark Kent is a journalist, he was born with extraordinary abilities. Batman became Batman because the murder of his parents defined his entire life and motivated his war on crime. Even Joker's actions are rooted in his psychological condition and personal trauma.

People generally do not become vigilantes for no reason. I think you should explore what drives your protagonist to fight criminals or other people. What is the emotional wound, obsession, trauma, or personal belief that pushes him in that direction? Why does he choose to use the power instead of simply living his life?

The second thing I would think about is the sword itself. After everything that happens to him—the pressure, the nightmares, and the female antagonist who starts hunting him—why doesn't he simply get rid of the sword?

For example, in The Mask, the main character can throw the mask away if he decides the consequences are too much. Your protagonist could easily throw the sword into a river and walk away from all the madness. Maybe someone else, even a dog, could find it later.

But he doesn't do that. The question is why.

In Spider-Man, Peter Parker cannot simply throw away his powers. They are part of him, and he has no choice but to grow up and learn how to live with them. I think you should consider creating a similar situation. Perhaps the sword cannot be discarded, perhaps it has bonded with him, or perhaps abandoning it would have terrible consequences.

In my opinion, this is something worth developing further: why a seemingly ordinary man chooses to become a vigilante, and why he cannot simply get rid of the sword when everything begins to fall apart around him.

Hi Aleksandr, thank you for your thoughtful insight.

The sword is not designed as an object the protagonist can simply discard... in the concept of JEMLUR, it functions more as a binding force than a tool something that reveals and activates a latent state within him rather than granting External Power!

Once that connection is established, the idea of “removing it” becomes irrelevant in a traditional sense, because the sword is not outside of him anymore. It operates as an extension of will, perception, and consequence.

This is also why the protagonist cannot simply walk away from it.

The moment it awakens something within him, the responsibility is no longer tied to possession, but to awareness the choice becomes not whether to hold the sword, but how to live with what it reveals.

Once bound, separation is no longer a possibility, only transformation.

Appreciate you engaging with the concept at this level these are exactly the kinds of questions that define its direction.

Seventy

Creator & IP Holder

“The Light of Sunless”

I think a random man who simply finds the sword is not enough. The character needs a backstory, and he has to be “chosen” in order to find it. Otherwise, the sword just feels like a piece of iron that randomly selects someone, and the audience won’t believe it. They need to believe that this specific person was meant to be chosen by the sword, rather than just someone who happened to find it.

To use The Matrix as an example: Morpheus doesn’t choose Neo just because he is a hacker. Neo is already searching for Morpheus, and he doubts whether the world is truly what it appears to be. That’s why the connection works.

If you look at any story, nothing really happens by pure accident. So if I were you, I would avoid making him a random passerby. Instead, I would make him a specific person who was always meant to be chosen by the sword.

Aleksandr, I understand your point and I agree that the audience needs a reason to believe why this person and not someone else. However, I don't think that necessarily means he must already know about the sword or be searching for it.

For me, the important thing is not that he finds the sword by accident, but that the sword sees something in him that nobody else does. He may begin as an ordinary person, but the story gradually reveals why he was worthy of being chosen.

Using The Matrix as an example, Neo is searching for answers before meeting Morpheus. But there are also many stories where the hero starts as a nobody and only later discovers the reason they were chosen.

The audience accepts it as long as the choice feels meaningful rather than arbitrary.

So my intention isn't that a random sword picks a random passerby... It's that the sword recognizes something hidden within him, and the story slowly uncovers what that is.

Thank you, Best Regards,

Seventy

Creator & IP Holder

“The Light of Sunless”

think it should be stated in the synopsis that this is not a random person and not a random sword.

Thank you Aleksandr for the feedback. I understand your point.

There is actually a much deeper mythology behind both the protagonist and the sword than what is revealed in this short synopsis. I intentionally kept those elements vague to preserve some of the mystery and focus on the psychological journey, but I appreciate the observation.

The project's whitepaper explores the broader lore, origins, and significance of both in much greater detail.

If you're interested in exploring the project further, you can read the Cinematic Whitepaper by clicking "View Screenplay" or by using the link below:

https://www.stage32.com/sites/stage32.com/files/assets/screenplay/137182...

Best Regards

Seventy

Creator & IP Holder

“The Light of Sunless”