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TAGLINE: The world’s newest heroes wear hoodies and sneakers! NO Capes NO Masks
LOGLINE:
Twins Mimi and Vitus discover a wall between their rooms that responds to a secret rhyme. Each time they speak it, they’re pulled into a hidden world where they’ve been chosen to complete missions based on real-life challenges kids face, and return with things to help fix them.
SYNOPSIS:
After moving from the city to the countryside, 7-year-old twins MIMI and VITUS each have the same strange dream on their first night in the new house, a WALL whispering a magical rhyme. They wake up in the middle of the night, both unable to sleep, and realize they’ve dreamed the exact same thing.
Turns out, anything you dream on the first night might come true.
Curious and brave, they speak the rhyme out loud, and the wall glows. It’s a portal. And they’ve been chosen.
Each time they say the rhyme, the wall pulls them into a secret world where real-life kid stuff takes on a wild, magical twist: a friend losing their joy? That becomes a quest to find KING LAUGHTER. Being selfish or silly? Face THE BOLD ME. Ignoring your mess? Watch out for MR.POO
Behind the WALL, questions become quests, feelings become creatures, and every adventure in different Worlds, brings them back home, with something to help: a gift, a change, a lesson… and another rhyme.
That’s how MIMI&VITUS became the newest kind of heroes: no masks, no superpowers, just heart, hoodies, and adventure’s honor.
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Sounds like great FUN! I'm thinking "emotions become quirky" could be clarified. Then, maybe "magical character lurk" or "a wild world of magical characters"...
Bradford Richardson Bradford...thank you for your advise. its really not that easy putting all your Story, Thoughts in a tiny Longline.....but I think it was the previous one! What do you think about the Synopsis?
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Getting there......how is that Longline!!!
Step by Step..