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MIMI & VITUS ADVENTURE - BEHIND THE WALL - EPISODE 1: "DAY X"
By Ela Ilham Von Schöning
TAGLINE: The world’s newest heroes wear hoodies and sneakers! NO Capes NO Masks
LOGLINE:
Twins Mimi and Vitus discover a wall between their rooms that responds to a secret rhyme. Each time they speak it, they’re pulled into a hidden world where they’ve been chosen to complete missions based on real-life challenges kids face, and return with things to help fix them.
SYNOPSIS:
Twins Mimi and Vitus leave their fast-paced city life behind when their creative parents, Olivia and Daniel, decide to move the family to an old countryside house for a fresh start.
On Day X, the final day of their move, the kids sense something strange about the house — and the wall between their rooms. Their quirky but wise neighbor, John, seems to know more than he lets on.
This pilot opens with the family’s emotional and humorous goodbye to their old life and the first subtle signs that something mysterious is waiting in their new home.
Magic doesn’t always announce itself. Sometimes, it starts with an echo… and a wall that remembers.
MIMI & VITUS ADVENTURE - BEHIND THE WALL - EPISODE 1: "DAY X"
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Sounds like great FUN! I'm thinking "emotions become quirky" could be clarified. Then, maybe "magical character lurk" or "a wild world of magical characters"...
Bradford Richardson Bradford...thank you for your advise. its really not that easy putting all your Story, Thoughts in a tiny Longline.....but I think it was the previous one! What do you think about the Synopsis?
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Getting there......how is that Longline!!!
Step by Step..
MIMI & VITUS ADVENTURE - BEHIND THE WALL - EPISODE 1: "DAY X"
Pilot - Opening Scenes 1 - 3! IT´S A WRAP
written by Ela Ilham v. Schoening
SCENE 1 – EXT. CITY SKYLINE – DAY (MONTAGE)
Early morning light over the skyline. The city stirs. Soft instrumental music plays — gentle, nostalgic.
JOHN (V.O.)
They called it Day X.
Don’t ask me why. Kids name things like that. But this one… stuck.
Daniel and Olivia planned it. Everyone talked about it for months. Leaving the city. Starting over. Saying goodbye to noise, speed... habits.
Adults called it a fresh chapter.
But for Mimi and Vitus? It felt like closing the whole book.
INT. CITY APARTMENT – DAY
The apartment is nearly empty. Boxes taped shut. Photos off the walls. Dust and light in every corner.
JOHN (V.O.) (CONT’D)
Daniel and Olivia met in Florence.
She saw the world through a lens. He sold it one ad at a time.
They built something beautiful. Fast. Then came the kids. And eventually... this choice.
To slow down. To be a family, not just a schedule.
SCENE 2 – INT. FAMILY APARTMENT – CONTINUOUS
Sunlight hits the floorboards. There’s nothing left but echoes, dust... and a single, half-full bottle of champagne.
Daniel spins slowly in the center of the room.
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DANIEL
Wow. You don’t realize how full a place was... until it’s just your voice echoing back.
He claps once. The sound bounces.
Olivia enters, barefoot, holding the champagne by the neck.
OLIVIA
grinning
We started this place with a bottle of champagne...
DANIEL
And we’re ending it with one. That’s called consistency.
OLIVIA
Or denial.
DANIEL
Same difference.
She dances lightly across the kitchen floor.
OLIVIA (CONT’D)
Remember when we moved in? No furniture. Just champagne, a mattress, and you humming Sinatra at 2 A.M.
DANIEL
mock offended
Excuse you. That was Dean Martin.
She hums. They both sing, wildly off-key:
BOTH
♪ When the moon hits your eye like a big pizza pie — THAT’S AMORE! ♪
MIMI (O.S.)
Mooom! Daaad! Didn’t you say we’re late?
OLIVIA
We’re just saying goodbye, sweetie!
DANIEL
Alright, alright! Go say goodbye to John — we’ll meet you at the car in
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ten.
SCENE 3 – EXT. SIDEWALK – MOMENTS LATER
JOHN, THEIR ELDERLY, SWEET OLD NEIGHBOR, WAITS OUTSIDE HIS DOOR. HE HAS WATERY EYES AND TWO TINY GIFT BAGS. MIMI AND VITUS RUN TOWARD HIM.
JOHN
Well now... you’re not babies anymore.
Mimi and Vitus glance at each other.
MIMI
Babies? Nope, sir. Official school kids now.
VITUS
And future engineers. Or magicians. We’ll see.
MIMI
We’ll come visit, promise. You’ll always be our neighbor.
VITUS
You have a smartphone now. Dad put that conversation app on it. We can call anytime.
John gets misty-eyed, holding them close.
JOHN (smiling) I bet you will. I do have something for you two smarties.
He hands them each a small box — two tiny, handmade pillows.
JOHN (CONT’D)
Put these under your pillow on the first night in the new house. You know what they say... first-night dreams come true.
The kids try not to laugh.
MIMI & VITUS (V.O.)
Classic John. Always full of stories.
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JOHN
You two are great kids. I wish you the best new start ever, kiddos.
He crouches down slightly, lowers his voice with a twinkle.
JOHN (CONT’D)
They’ve been waiting a long, long time for this moment.
Mimi and Vitus look at each other — amused, a little weirded out.
VITUS
whispers
He’s a little crazy.
MIMI
Yeah... but in the best way.
They hug him one last time, then run off to meet their parents at the car.
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