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Twelve magical coins are the only hope against an immortal army fueled by dark magic and "mani power." Driven by his father's legacy, young Karan must race against a treacherous prince to gather them before their kingdom, Beldoria, falls.
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In the unrivaled kingdom of Beldoria, the mightiest stronghold of the world, an immortal army fueled by black magic and led by a sinister king—his forehead ablaze with a mani stone of unholy power—marches to annihilate all life, guided by the treacherous King Bali. Aging King Dharma, desperate to save his people, knows no mortal force can prevail. With other kingdoms dismissing the legend of twelve mythical coins as myth, Dharma sends his untested son, Prince Karan, a scholar untrained in war, on a globe-spanning quest to find these artifacts, each granting divine powers to crush the enemy while draining its former wielder’s strength.
Karan’s odyssey plunges him into realms of blood and sorcery: he outwits a kingdom of cannibalistic wolf-humans, slaying their warlord king for a coin; battles grotesque “onion monkeys,” nested beasts spilling young in layered horrors; and braves a time-looped sanctuary where resurrected dinosaurs and colossal creatures guard a coin within a monstrous twin pair. Each coin’s cryptic puzzle sharpens Karan’s wisdom and forges him into a warrior, but catastrophe strikes after claiming six: Bali’s ruthless prince ambushes him, seizes the coins, and leaves Karan deadly injured. Word arrives that Beldoria has fallen, Dharma slain. Broken and bleeding, Karan grapples with his shattered purpose—abandon the quest and fade into obscurity, or rise to reclaim his destiny.
A cryptic guide leads him to a mystical cave where hundreds of white marble statues judge his worth, offering to imprint his will and rise as a stone army to wage his war. Reborn, Karan follows the coins’ ancient map to a time-warped sanctuary, slaying a beastly pair to claim a coin. He confronts a vengeful ghost, avenging its family’s murder to unlock a coin’s path, and pilots a divine Vimana—an anti-gravity war machine wielding Brahmastra and Sudarshan Chakra—to storm a hidden mountain fortress. To seize another coin, he aligns a star-guided travel ring amidst raging storms; for the next, he sacrifices four elemental essences—earth, water, fire, air—to enter a sacred cave and outwit an invisible guardian’s riddles.
With each coin, Karan amasses the power to avenge Beldoria, but the quest’s toll threatens his soul. In a world ravaged by magic, treason, and apocalyptic war, one truth endures: only the coins can shatter Bali’s immortal army, and only Karan, forged in pain and battle, can wield them to restore a lost kingdom.
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This sounds like an interesting movie concept of 12 movies. The logline needs to be shortened.
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Thank you, Heldi, for the excellent feedback. I'm working on shortening the logline but finding it challenging to keep the story's essence intact.
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I feel your pain Amit... it's super hard to do.
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Lots of action and imagination - could see this as a franchise - well done
Wow, thanks Lauren Hackney! Thrilled you see the action and imagination popping off the page — franchise vibes are the dream! Appreciate the love!