Introduce Yourself : Introducing Myself In A way That Reflects My Writing abilities. by Hassan Farah

Welcome to Stage 32! Your introduction definitely got my attention especially the part about writing sad stories because it’s safer than your other hobbies.

It sounds like you’ve been through quite a journey, and I respect that you’re looking for honest, constructive feedback. That’s one of the best ways to grow as a writer. Wishing you the best with your writing and future publications. Looking forward to seeing what you create!

Thank you, Mary, for your words. I never thought that in my wildest dreams I would write a script, but I had a feeling and it always stuck with me that if I just gave it a shot, I would write. I guess I have inherited some of the writing from my late dad, who wrote with passion. He was an editor, but I have chosen a different path. And now it seems that maybe writing was my desired destiny.

That’s really beautiful. It sounds like writing was always somewhere in you, even before you realized it. Your dad being an editor and writing with passion must have had a bigger influence on you than you probably noticed at the time.

And now I’m curious, what kind of stories are you writing? You mentioned your screenplay journey, and I’d genuinely love to hear about the script you’re working on. What’s the story about, and what inspired you to write it?

Hassan Farah this introduction is doing exactly what a good introduction should it tells us who you are without a single boring sentence. Getting fired three times from the same job, cycling into a car then hitting a cyclist, now writing sad stories about other people's tragic lives for safety reasons. That is a voice. Welcome to Stage 32 what kind of stories are you working on?

I have written a complete thriller. It's about a female sniper who is decorated with three medals—pinned by the President of the United States. She is the only woman in U.S. history to receive such honors.

But when she returns from deployment, her brother—an NYPD detective—is murdered while investigating a corrupt officer.

That's where her fight begins.

She uncovers a conspiracy that goes all the way to the top—judges, senators, the police commissioner, and a network of bribes, payoffs, and assassins. She's hunted by the system she swore to protect. She's betrayed by the FBI agent she saved in Iraq. And she has to protect an innocent doctor and his family from the corrupt sergeant who killed her brother.

It's a high-concept thriller with franchise potential—developed as both a standalone feature and a 6-8 season prestige series.

The script is complete, polished, and ready for review. I'm looking for honest feedback, connections, and potential partners who can help move it forward.

That's what I'm working on.

Wow, that’s quite a story. The personal connection with her brother’s murder gives the thriller an emotional core, while the larger conspiracy raises the stakes. I can see why you see potential for both a feature and a series.

I’m curious about the protagonist, though what is she like beyond being a highly decorated sniper? And what inspired you to create this particular character and story?

I have accomplished my first script that I have ever written with a passion; the story is inspired by my late mother and I dedicated this script to her. She was everything in my life and I was blessed to be with her in her last moments in this life, and I was blessed again to be right there by her grave and say my final goodbye, though I believe we will meet again.

Jenny Morales is not your typical woman who seduces or sexualises her body to get what she wants; she has a rifle and a sharp mind that will bend steel. Get close to her and she will put a bullet between your eyes.

I am sorry if I got carried away; sometimes my emotions take over me and I become someone else. Rest assured, I don't have split personality or suffer from delusions.(LOL)

I know it's not the finest, but the story is solid.

Hassan Farah this introduction is doing exactly what a good introduction should it tells us who you are without a single boring sentence. Getting fired three times from the same job, cycling into a car then hitting a cyclist, now writing sad stories about other people's tragic lives for everyone's safety. That is a voice. Welcome to Stage 32 what kind of stories are you working on?

Hassan Farah, You didn’t get carried away at all. I can understand why this story carries so much emotion for you, especially knowing that it was inspired by your mother and dedicated to her. Writing your first screenplay from such a personal place must have made the experience incredibly meaningful.

And Jenny Morales sounds like a very strong and interesting protagonist. I like that her strength comes from her skills, intelligence, and determination rather than relying on the usual stereotypes.

You said the story is solid, and honestly, that’s what matters most at this stage. What part of the story are you most proud of the character of Jenny, the conspiracy, or the emotional journey behind it?

I've always believed that a strong protagonist doesn't ask for respect—they command it. And that's exactly what Jenny Morales does..

INT. FBI TRAINING ACADEMY - LECTURE HALL - DAY

Fluorescent lights hum. Rows of desks. FBI agents sit on the left. CIA on the right.

In the front row center: the FIRST TEAM—the President's Secret Service detail. Arrogance radiates from every corner. FRANK walks in. The room snaps quiet.

FRANK

Good morning.

Silence.

FRANK

I know what you're thinking. You've had instructors. You've heard it all. But today is different.

He steps to the podium.

FRANK

I owe my life to today's guest. Actually, I owe her two lives. She saved me in Iraq while taking a bullet to the shoulder.

Whispers ripple.

FRANK

Navy Cross. Silver Star. Medal of Honor. That's all you need to know.

Frank turns to the side door.

FRANK

GUNNERY SERGEANT JENNY MORALES

Join us.

JENNY enters. No medals. No uniform. Just dark tactical gear and a slung rifle. She steps to the podium. Counts silently to ten.

JENNY

I know what you're thinking. Who is she? What can she teach me?

She steps away, walking up to a young FBI agent.

JENNY

You think you know how to fight. How to shoot. How to survive.

She looks him dead in the eye.

JENNY

You don't.

She turns to the CIA block, then to the First Team.

JENNY

I'm not here to teach you how to shoot. I'm here to teach you how to think. When the plan falls apart—when someone tries to kill the President—will you freeze?

I'm here to teach you how to make the right decision in the split second before everything goes wrong.

She scans the room.

JENNY

You don't have to like me. But you will listen. Because one day, what I teach you might be the only thing keeping you alive. Any questions?

Silence. Then a voice from the back.

Welcome to Stage32! Sounds like quite the journey! Being a rollerskating enthusiast and the fish having a vendetta against you sound like stories themselves. Best of luck to you in your creative endeavors!

I can see the kind of character you’re trying to build with Jenny. She definitely comes across as confident and formidable, and I like that you’re establishing her presence through her dialogue rather than having to explain everything about her.

The “I’m here to teach you how to think” part stood out to me because it tells us a lot about her mindset. And the fact that she walks into a room full of FBI, CIA, and Secret Service personnel without trying to impress anyone says a lot about her confidence.

Now I’m curious about the voice from the back. What happens next in that scene? Does someone challenge Jenny, or does she immediately take control of the room?

Hassan Farah , this is the first intro I’ve read in a while that actually feels like it was written by a writer instead of someone filling out a form. The way you turn every hobby into a small tragedy is darkly funny and controlled, especially the cycling-to-driving-to-hitting-a-cyclist sequence. That’s the kind of deadpan escalation that sticks.

Also, “I’m broke enough as it is, I can’t afford to love somebody else” might be the most honest line I’ve seen on here this week.

Hi Cressida Hale,

Thank you for your comment I really appreciate it. You know I thought introducing myself as way to make people smile or laugh, that's who I am and nothing will change that. In this crazy world we need laughter and I am glad maybe I might put a little smile on your lovely face.

Welcome. Try to cut the ranting and useless modifiers.

Well, Hassan, if the goal was to show your writing voice, I think you succeeded.

Welcome to the S32 Club, Hassan Farah.

David Taylor

Thanks for the feedback, David. I appreciate you taking the time to read my introduction.

My God, you've had it real rough buddy I'm sorry it had to be like this, hopefully you'll find something that you really like doing and keep on moving forward.

Alex Luca,

I really liked roller skating and cycling. Now it's just a memory—past and gone with the rest of the memories that my brain barely keeps. But I'm still here, and I have a family that loves me, and I love them even more in return.

I'm glad you have a loving family, my family isn't exactly bad it's just the things that happened and are still actively happening kinda keep us at a stranger level to be honest, especially with my father given he never truly helped raise me and my older brother we turned out to be very different from what life expects us to be, I became a insecure introverted guy and my brother "believes" he's extroverted when in reality he's just impulsive and has issues making new friends just like I am.