This one has good high stakes (spirit selves dissolve forever). You get a better feel for what can be lost (their souls) if they don't find each other. The only thing I would consider adding is the obstacle. What is keeping them from achieving their goal? Even so, you can still tell the stakes are high.

This sounds unique, @Sandra! You're right, @Leonardo. I didn't even think about the obstacle.

And I just thought of something else, @Sandra. You use "each other" twice. I think your logline would sound better if you use "each other" once. Maybe "Two souls destined to be together must find each other."

It does sound unique Sandra, and plenty of opportunity for thrilling suspense, drama and hope.

Thank you Leonardo Ramirez , the obstacle it’s a good point of view, but I want to keep it “not evident” on the logline! Thank you Maurice Vaughan you are right, I need to change that! Tomorrow will do that! Thank you John Snell , means a lot for me! Thank you all for your time to read my Logline:))***

You're welcome, @Sandra.

You're welcome Sandra Isabel Correia, best of luck with it!

Thanks Maurice Vaughan I already changed :)) Thanks John Snell, I am also cheering for you :)

You're welcome, @Sandra. I think your logline flows better now.

Thank you Maurice Vaughan :))**

Sandra Isabel Correia, you have a strong core idea with great stakes and emotion but your logline could benefit from more specificity to make it truly stand out among other high-concept romance/fantasy stories.

Clear conflict & urgency- The protagonists must find and fall in love before their spirit selves dissolve forever, which establishes a ticking clock and stakes.

Strong thematic appeal- The idea of destined love is universally compelling, making it easy for audiences to connect with the emotional core of your story.

High-concept hook- The “souls dissolving forever” adds a unique supernatural twist to the classic love story, giving it a fresh angle.

Areas for refinement:

More specificity could help- Right now, it’s broad. Who are these souls? Do they remember their past connection? Is there a force trying to keep them apart? A little more detail could clarify what makes YOUR version of the concept stand out.

Clarify the emotional journey- Is this about star-crossed lovers overcoming obstacles, a deep soul recognition, or more of a cosmic mystery?

“Must fall in love” feels passive- Consider emphasizing active pursuit (e.g., “must fight against fate,” “must defy unseen forces,” or “must navigate lifetimes of separation”).

An example based purely on my feedback to your logline (obviously I haven't read the script so take this with a HUGE grain of salt):

“In a cosmic test of fate, two soulmates must find each other and fall in love, but when one begins to remember their past lives and the other doesn’t, their reunion becomes a race against time as unseen forces pull them apart. If they fail, their spirits will be erased from existence, breaking their eternal bond forever.”

Thank you, Ashley Renee Smith rating my logline and especially for your comments to improve it! I 'll study them and try to make my logline stronger. Thank youuuu!

Hi Ashley Renee Smith Leonardo Ramirez and Maurice Vaughan . Based on your comments and inputs, I rewrote the Logline. Can you let me know your opinion? I'll appreciate that! Thank you: Two souls destined for each other, Yazebel, a fearless Londoner, and Freya, a New York novelist, must unite on earth and fall in love, defying unseen forces that seek to keep them apart, before their spirits dissolve forever. :))

I like this tons better Sandra Isabel Correia. You have the goal and a general sense of the obstacle and a solid consequence if they don't achieve their goal. The only question I have is what are the unseen forces? Is it one or many? Do you want to clearly define the unseen force, meaning specify what it is? I don't think there's a right/wrong answer there - just something to think about.

Thank you Leonardo Ramirez for your opinion and your time! The unseen forces are their own beliefs, struggles on earth as humans and the spiritual realm rules. If they don’t overcome their struggles and make the spiritual journey, their spirits will dissolve forever in the void! That’s why I chose “unseen forces” :))

Ah yes, totally understand Sandra Isabel Correia. Thank you!

Sandra Isabel Correia Just to affirm that it sounds great!!

Thanks, my sweet friend Leonardo Ramirez :))

You are very welcome Sandra Isabel Correia !

It leaves me w a lot of questions, I like it’s two chics. It seems really romantic. If not earth were they from.. ? What Romantic way might they be finding each other?? Why would they dissolve??? I mean there isn’t enough water thrown on character, and they dissolve, stories?! ;-)