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THE BLACK PEARL
By William Parker
Blown deep into enemy space, a resourceful Union Fleet fighter captain fights to rescue a princess so she can save her people from the evil Kryonean Empire.
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Sounds like an exciting Sci-Fi space story, William Parker! And great title. Just three suggestions for the logline:
#1) Add a comma before "a resourceful."
#2) Change "must save" to "fights to save."
#3) Change the first "save" to "rescue" so you don't use "save" twice in the logline.
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