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A down-on-her-luck, investigative journalist is called to a small town where her missing brother resurfaces in a coma, and must overcome her feelings for him and alcoholic dependency as she uncovers a body-changing virus spreading through town.
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Better World sounds interesting, Glenn Anthony Maneval Jr! I think your logline could be tightened up a little, and I suggest adding the journalist's goal in the story and the stakes.
Something like: After a down-on-her-luck, investigative journalist is called to a small town where her missing brother resurfaces in a coma, she must overcome her feelings for him and alcoholic dependency to stop a ___________ (tell what the laboratory calamity is) to/so/in order to ___________ (the stakes).
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