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A brilliant young golfer who's also a cynical intellectual risks everything to expose an ancient, sprawling conspiracy that hides the malevolent truth swirling beneath the heavenly golfing urban utopia of Parradice City.
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Stryker Templeton, his best friend Orland and their robotic caddy, I-Caddy-4U, begin another round of golf in the spectacular, cosmopolitan and most admired city on the planet: Parradice City. A golfer's utopia, the Royal & Mystical Golf Course of Parradice winds through immaculate residential neighborhoods, soars alongside the Transcendent City Center of Parradice (rated the planet's #1 Wonder of the World) – a natural-human construction carved into Mount Blackhart, and hovers just above Lake Unwieldy, the world's largest, deepest natural inland body of water.
Their round is shattered by the killing of a stranger right in front of them by the police who claim the man is an escaped patient from the Parradice City Mental Health Center. The stranger, Wieland C. Nosun, told Stryker and co. he had just escaped from a secret slave-labor camp operated by the Flawless Golfing Technology Products Company.
Stryker researches this world's version of the Internet (PECNET) and discovers the missing population theory, a conspiracy theory that states the population of Parradice City and its thirteen colonies should be much greater than the official government figure (about a million greater). Aided by former reporter Deeland Search, who gives him a tiny computer disk with all the data Deeland has accumulated regarding the deaths of authors of publications about the missing population theory and a laser gun plus a warning: “Trust no one but yourself”, Stryker sets off to discover the real, messy, tragic story of Parradice City.
Stryker's little group gets off the grid by sneaking away into the Great Northern Forest where they meet up with Allswun, a well-know spiritual guru whom they discuss the government conspiracy and missing population theory. She tells them of a horrific vision she's had numerous times while meditating. The vision is of a gigantic demon throwing people into a canyon-sized fire pit. She and Stryker decide that the visions indicate (if the conspiracy theory is correct about a network of secret slave-labor camps) that the government-led conspiracy leaders have decided to execute the slaves for reasons unknown. Stryker and Allswun devise a plan to bring down the leaders of the conspiracy: obtain video and audio footage of the secret slave-labor operations and send it to the Cosmic Newsgroup, the largest media outlet in the galaxy.
Stryker and I-Caddy-4U, disguised as a quality-control inspector and worker bot respectively, sneak into the headquarters of the Flawless Golfing Technology Products Company. They find a garbage chute that Stryker's bot barely fits in. With not so gentle help from Stryker, I-Caddy-4U slides down the chute and into a subterranean giant Dumpster. Bot finds the factory floor, obtains video and audio of the secret operations, including a supervisor kicking the body of woman into a large trench after she dies of a heart attack while on the assembly line. After barely escaping a small army of armed security guards, Stryker and his bot make it alive into the waiting multi-passenger PTU (Personal Transport Unit) piloted by Orland.
They reach the tee of the 20th hole and prepare to send the file to the Cosmic Newsgroup. But Stryker discovers that Orland betrayed him by changing the system set-up of I-Caddy-4U. The bot is to follow Stryker's orders but if it receives an order from Orland that conflicts with Stryker's, Orland's order gets priority. And Orland tells the bot not to send the incriminating video file to the Cosmic Newsgroup. Although not part of the conspiracy, Orland is sympthatetic to their goal, that is, to maintain Parradice City's high standard of living at any cost.
While the two battle over sending the video file to the news media giant, Ian Blackhart and most of the city policing force descend upon the 20th tee. I-Caddy-4U, as ordered by Orland, destroys the evidence, and itself, by rolling off the nearby cliff. Faced with death from the policing agents' weapons or following his bot's method, and despondent over his failure to bring down the conspiracy and save all the lives of the slaves, Stryke opts to kill himself. But not before he blows away Orland with a laser blast.
Stryker jumps off the cliff. A smug Ian Blackhart orders the scheduled genocide to proceed as planned. He decides to celebrate the conspiracy's victory by playing the 20th hole by himself. Blackhart is shocked by the sound of Stryker's voice from behind him. He turns around just in time to see a golf ball hit by Stryker speeding right at him with I-Caddy-4U hovering in mid-air just behind Stryker. The ball hits the conspiracy leader squarely in the middle of the forehead. He's dead as he hits the ground. The bot didn't die. It used its newly acquired flying powers (as shown earlier in the script on the third hole) to fake its suicide and to save Stryker when he appeared to kill himself by walking off the cliff.
They transmit the video file to the Cosmic Newsgroup and the authorities arrest the leaders of the conspiracy. Story ends with Parradice City in turmoil. The old government leaders are imprisioned and no new ones are in place to lead the city. A proposal to create a new form of government in which all major issues are decided by a majority vote (conducted online) has yet to be ratified. But at least about a million lives around the planet have been spared.
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Thanks for the feedback! The script received really, really good coverage from www.screenplaycoverage.com back in 2012 or 2011. For some unfathomable reason, I made changes to the script. Big mistake! I have since changed it back so it's basically the original script. The major problem is it would require a big budget to accommodate the f/x. But I think the story is strong enough so that it will eventually attract a film investor with deep pockets.
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I think the storyline is good but has like 80’s aspects… and whys? Fake places takes it away from it.. and why is everything the top of the top.. the deepest lake the strongest company.. .. then ends like a been done before cartoon exit. Trash chute entrance.. an Aladdin flying carpet exit.. For me, It needs more creative things swapped in. It didn’t need all the fantasy, it’d be scarier if it was just like .. in Nevada and more real. But then it’s like not as interesting. It seems more slight kid movie if without it. It could be some kids are trying to figure out where the other kids went as kids are disappearing at school and stumble into this slave labor camp that an online store is making them create products for..?
It could use some comedy?? A murder and a planned genocide is a bit rough.. there’s no reason to kill the business.. why kill the golden goose??? they should be working w school officials to make even more workers appear.. maybe have a list of current victims the kids recover.. and being chased after seen, have to find someone to listen. Cause these guys took over the cops and politics, a while ago.. would have worked .
I didn’t understand the golfing part and when did golf change to over 18 tees.. not bad though.
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