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Frustrated with the disappointments of dating and everything else, a lonely, insecure guy decides to start wearing a big black sack over his entire head and body everywhere he goes, with unexpected results.
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This sounds like a funny Drama/Comedy, Arthur Tiersky. The logline has extra words in it. How about this: "Frustrated with the disappointments of dating and everything else, a lonely, insecure guy starts wearing a black sack over his entire body everywhere he goes, which gets him unexpected results."
That IS tighter. Thanks, Maurice!
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