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"SOJOURN: IMPERIUM AETERNAM"
By Steven Gamella
The Dark Prince of the Lightbringer Order muses on his conquests from a position of supreme power.
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Crime. Corruption. Decadence. Excess. Just a few of the vices that the Lightbringer Order, and ancient organization of dark mystics opposed for eons, before the arrival of the Man against Time, a Messiah, who would deliver the Local Group into a new era of peace and justice, arrived. Sukui no Hikari Munraito-sama, the adopted son of Master Iori Nomato, himself the Sun-Child of Alianthi and Uehara, took it upon himself to purge the Local Group of all those he saw as unrighteous, first and foremost, the Imperial Society of Angels and Demons, and its Grand Priestess, Ai Takada.
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Hey, really intriguing concept the mix of cosmic mysticism and a morally complex Messiah stands out.
The logline could be clearer on the main conflict and stakes, and the synopsis might benefit from tighter focus, especially around the protagonist’s journey.
I’d be happy to help refine it into something more sharp and market-ready if you’re open to it.
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Steven Gamella This feels very mythic and ambitious there’s a strong sense of scale and lore behind it.
The idea of a “Dark Prince” reflecting on power and conquest is interesting, especially if the story leans into philosophy and moral ambiguity.
That said, the logline and synopsis are a bit hard to follow right now due to the density of names and world-building. It might help to simplify and ground it through a clear central character and conflict.
If you can make the audience quickly understand who the story is about and what’s at stake, the concept could land much stronger.
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