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A friend of a millionaire attends a getaway party with a nostalgic game idea and a plot to investigate the death of a lady during the last party, suspecting that one of his friends is the murderer.
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After earning his master's degree abroad, Ben, the billionaire's son, decides to host a getaway party for his old college friends at a private beach villa. One of his friends introduces a nostalgic game that forces them to relive their wildest experiences from college. The game's objective is to bring the person who killed a young woman at the previous party to justice before they kill another person.
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I like the nostalgic game angle, Joseph Duke.
I think the second part of the logline is vague (The subsequent sequence of events threatens their very existence and introduces a nostalgic game that threatens to 'kill again').
This isn't a full logline, but it's a start: "After the son of a billionaire invites his old college classmates to a remote getaway party, they play a nostalgic game that makes them relive their wildest experiences _____________."
I'm trying to figure out the end of the logline. What's the protagonist's goal in the story?
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one of them is out to unravel a covered up murder of another student
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you need to write the goal of the hero of the story.
a friend of a millionaire gets to a party with a game and investigates the death of a man during the last party. suspecting that one of his friends is the killer.
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Arthur this sure bring it from a different angle... i love it. Hope you dont mind if i copy and twick. Thanks a million
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Joseph Duke, Sure. We help each other to make our loglines better.
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A millionaire's friend attends a getaway party at a remote beach villa with nostalgic games and a plot to investigates the death a lady during the last party, suspecting that one of his friends is the murderer.
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I like the new logline, Joseph Duke. One tiny suggestion: Change "the death a lady" to "the death of a lady."
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