The tone of your logline is evocative and carries a poetic weight, hinting at a story rich in emotion and political themes. However, the logline is too vague to fully engage the reader or clearly convey what the story is about. The phrase “stages of political grief” is conceptually intriguing, but it’s abstract and doesn’t give us a clear sense of the plot. Similarly, describing the protagonist simply as “a working man” doesn’t help us understand what makes this character distinct or why we should care about his journey. The final line, “there’s always more to lose,” adds to the mood but doesn’t clarify the stakes or direction of the story. Consider grounding it in something more specific: what is the central conflict? What event sets the story in motion? What does the protagonist want or need, and what stands in the way? If you can clarify those elements while maintaining your compelling tone, this could become a powerful and memorable logline.