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THE JACKPOT

THE JACKPOT
By Jeelan Syed

GENRE: Action, Drama
LOGLINE:

When a simple getaway job ends in tragedy and prison, a young, principled, and desperate convict will double down on his plans for a once-in-a-lifetime score.

SYNOPSIS:

Desperate to build his future, a young wheelman named SHAWN agrees to follow his friend TED into a Miami bank robbery as the team’s getaway driver. When the following chase leads to the murder of a hostage, Shawn pulls the car over and turns his entire four-man team into the authorities. While his actions have earned him notoriety and hardship in prison, Shawn makes a deliberate effort to create some opportunity for himself and find a mentor. While most of the gangsters in lockup see Shawn’s principles and boundaries as an inexcusable weakness, Shawn does find a washed-up thief and hustler named LOU who sees Shawn’s “straight-edge” approach to life as a fast-track through the appeals process - and then, crucially, as a connection with the outside world. Meeting with Shawn in secret, careful not to draw attention from the other prisoners, Lou teaches the boy everything he knows.

Sure enough, Shawn’s willingness to stay on the right side of his conscience - along with the fact that he was the one who ended the getaway chase - earn him an early parole. Following Lou's instructions, Shawn starts putting together a plan to hustle money out of one of the biggest money laundering operations in the world. In Miami, the Italian mob has stepped out of the drug trade. Instead, they own one of the largest contracting companies in the state - as well as the city's most prolific armored car company. Providing money laundering services through the construction business, they service every other criminal organization in the area.

Robbing them would be a victimless crime. Interviewing for a job as an armored car driver, Shawn starts learning the ropes of the business. Every car has a handful of workers, and the "book cooking" is done in the back of the car. When the daily pickups and drop-offs are done, the "extra" money - the laundered cash - is taken to a bank and distributed to its owners from there.

When Shawn was arrested, it was because he chose to back Ted’s play. Knowing that he can't take this money alone, Shawn works his job at the armored car company until Ted is released... and he asks Ted to repay the favor. Trying to help Ted get a job draws attention from the mob. Suddenly, they're looking more closely into Shawn and Ted's past. They know Shawn and Ted spent a lot of time together on the prison yard. If Shawn is going to start bringing his people into the organization, he needs to pass a loyalty test. One of the gangs buying protection through the Family is late in their dues, and Shawn needs to "make it right."

Taking the job, Shawn very quickly finds that there's no way to enforce the family's will without crossing a line he refuses to cross. Stealing a car, Shawn manages to escape the gang and the mob. While he obviously can't go back to his job at the armored car company, he knows a whole lot about that money laundering operation that he didn't know before! He knows the names and routines of the guys in the trucks; he knows the stops they make...

Pulling Ted into his scheme, Shawn starts planning to seize one of the trucks and secure the take. With nobody else to turn to for help, Shawn has no choice but to call the only gangsters he still knows: MILO and NOVA. The same two brothers who killed that hostage on the bank job. While the brothers are far too reckless to be trusted, they're just reckless enough to consider going along with Shawn's increasingly desperate plan.

Ted, on the other hand, is not. Walking into the armored car company, Ted explains everything that's happening - from Lou in prison to Shawn's new plan for seizing the car. With a simple phone call, the boss snuffs out Lou's life like a candle. To prove himself, Ted is given the job of killing Shawn. With a pair of mob enforcers, he sets out to do precisely this.

Finding Shawn at their motel, Ted lures Shawn into the car and talks him into driving out of the city - but once Shawn sees that he's being followed, he figures out what's really going on! Putting the car into gear, Shawn leads the mobsters on a chase so fast and dangerous that Ted can't risk getting a shot off! When the mobsters finally crash, Shawn stops the car and confronts Ted:

Right now, those enforcers are on their cell phones. Soon, there's going to be a whole lot more mobsters out there looking for Shawn - and probably Ted as well! The cops will be too, if they're not already! So, who's back at the armored car company? Maybe Ted, along with Milo and Nova, has a chance to access that bank account...

But what if the mobsters don't chase? What if they let the police run Shawn down for them, and then they kill him in prison? Assuring Ted that won't be a problem, Shawn tells his friend to go get the money.

Taking Ted's gun, Shawn robs the mobsters in the wrecked car. Guns, jewelry, clothes several thousand dollars in cash, even as they're on the phone with "the boss" and screaming bloody murder. Now, they're mad! Taking just enough time to allow the backup goons to arrive, Shawn gets in the car and drives.

Leading the cops and the mob on a wild chase through the streets of Miami, Shawn keeps the bad guys occupied. Taking Milo and Nova back to the armored car company, Ted steals an armored truck and drives it through the wall of the boss's house. Fighting their way through a security detail while the boss calls for help, Ted and the brothers give themselves enough time to interrogate the kingpin for his account passwords.

Madcap and ill-planned as this caper is, the boys manage to hack the boss's accounts! More than a week's worth of laundered drug distribution money is at their fingertips. The jackpot! Only now the mob is on their way, and their getaway driver is on the other side of town! Calling Shawn, Ted asks him for a pickup... only this time, Shawn wants to get paid in advance!

Marcos Fizzotti

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Preston Poulter

Solid!

Maurice Vaughan

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Rutger Oosterhoff

It's a good start for a solid logline. But I'ts not clear who is the -protagonist- or -antagonist- here, Jeelan. I'm going for the bad guy being the lead character. I guess something you can only pull that off when, as at some point in his yourney, he's looking for some kind of redemption. Although, even here there are exceptions, like " The Killer."

The main question that's still not answered now is " What's the (antag.) force trying to stop him in achieving his goal? External: becoming rich. Internal: in conflict with external; does he want to sacrifise his (presious) conscious to get rich of the death if an other soul? Does remorse slowly creeps in. In real life, 99% of us would would sacrifise our conscious, but does our hero? This question answered satisfactory, in whatever way, is the only reason I would make the yourney all the way to the theater. I want to feel his internal struggle! Suffer with him!

Tasha Lewis 2

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Jeelan Syed

Rutger Oosterhoff I hear you, I made some changes to the logline and defined clearly the protag & antag. The lead (the getaway driver) is actually innocent of any crimes other than participating in the heist. Yes, he goes through the journey of redemption in the script and reaches the other side.

Nate Rymer

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