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ZOLTAR
By Dashon English
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A senior citizen, who is near the end of his days, wishes to wind back the clock. As he happens upon a Zoltar machine, he becomes stuck as a teen and must relive his life all over again, all while being raised by Diane, his estranged daughter.
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Walter Douglas, originally from Nyack, NY, now lives in a
retirement home in Annandale, VA. After learning of friend’s
death, Walter becomes downtrodden and feels as if he could be
next. The next day, the retirement home charters busses and takes
it’s residents to the regional fair for an outing. While at the
fair, Walter happens upon the most unlikely thing; a Zoltar
machine. Walter uses the Zoltar machine and wishes to become young again.
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Try this 'A chronically ill man gets his wish granted and has to live his life over again starting at the age of fifteen."
Hi Amazing Kacee Thanks for your feedback, your suggesting that be the entire logline?
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A really great logline Steven Spielberg says should be a max of 25 words. In my research of loglines, you do not need character names or locations. here is a link about the steps to create a logline - https://www.scriptreaderpro.com/script-logline/ In addition the term Zoltar is trademarked and (c) so you actually can not use the word. In addition, how is this script different than the one Tom Hanks was in many years ago?
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Hi, Dashon. The concept is interesting, but what you posted is a synopsis. A logline would be like Kacee's suggestion. Are you pitching it to Netflix?
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you are right Maurice Vaughan I put the wrong thing there, its been updated, and yes we are trying to pitch to Netflix.
Amazing Kacee Same Universe, totally different story. It has a few pieces of that universe but we completely built a different universe for this series. And yes I need to change what i put as the logline. Its not correct. Really appreciate you taking the time to review and send me that detailed information.
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your welcome you do not need his daughter at the end and you can not use the word Zoltar as it is (c) and trademarked best
Dashon, why don't you change it to a completely new universe (without it being any part of the "Big" universe)? If it's part of the "Big" universe, won't that be copyright infringement?