THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
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THE 166
By Jeff Sturm
To escape bullying, a rebellious teen joins the high school police auxiliary, but his ambition turns deadly when he uncovers a sinister conspiracy that threatens to corrupt not just the program, but the entire community.
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This sounds interesting, Jeff Sturm, but I suggest adding the story goal and stakes. Right now, it's just the setup.
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Maurice Vaughan If you like I have a breakdown of the Logline, showing how the logline presents the stakes.
Sure, @Jeff, but I suggest showing the stakes clearly in your logline since producers, directors, etc. might only read the logline.
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Maurice Vaughan Will send you a message to show you, the formula this follows.
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