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SEARCHING FOR GRACE - PILOT
By Lawrence Whitener
Widowed racist rancher must take in his traumatized orphaned granddaughter. She can't speak and he can't stand her real birth mother. Their love for a very special mule heals all their broken hearts. Script and POC Trailer have 22 Awards on IMDb.
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A late night visit from the Sheriff brings bad new to Jax Fenton. A widower and recluse, he's not ready to become a parent again. 12-year-old Destiny Fenton has no where else to go. Watching her father and step-mother die left her unable to speak. When her real birth mother, a woman of some disrepute, shows up wanting the insurance money, a court battle ensues and Jax must profess his love for Destiny to all. But the key to little Destiny's breakthrough lies in Jax's very special mule, Grace. When your only friend, has four legs.
SEARCHING FOR GRACE - PILOT
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Lawrence Whitener The setup of a hardened man forced to care for a granddaughter he barely knows has strong dramatic potential, especially when layered with issues of race and generational conflict. However, the wording could benefit from more sensitivity and clarity. For instance, rather than labeling the character “crotchety racist,” you might frame his worldview as part of the character arc, e.g., “a bitter, old-fashioned rancher grappling with deep-seated prejudice.” Also, the mention of awards and IMDb isn’t necessary in the logline itself. It’s better suited for a pitch or query letter. Highlighting the mule as a symbolic or unifying force is unique and touching; lean into that emotional core.
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