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In the world of Globleo a teenage boy joins a traveling guild of wizards to find the crown of the King of the World so he can bring peace and order back to Globaleo
SYNOPSIS:
In a world called Globleo where 70% of people have magical powers while the 30% don't have magical powers, 1 teenage boy dreams of becoming this world's new King of the World, but he has a problem he doesn't have magical powers, so he creates his own spellbook and hopes 1 day he will have magic powers. Soon he wishes in a wishing well to have magic powers, and soon his spellbook changes and soon he got magical powers. Now he joins a traveling guild of wizards to travel the world to search for the crown that would make him the new King of the World
Hey Steven, great start but a bit clunky! You use world three times in one sentence. Watch for things like that. This formula helps: When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE],or else [STAKES].
ok thank you for the advice
So are you talking about the script of the synopsis?
The logline.
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