THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
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SCORPION DOWN
By Martin Nuza
A US nuclear submarine gets transported in time to the Viking era. The Captain and crew must try and survive while trying to find their way back to their home before their actions changes history, forever.
SYNOPSIS:
Based on the true life mysterious disappearance of the USS Scorpion in 1968, this story transports the submarine back in time to the Viking Era where the crew must battle for survival and join forces with one of the Viking tribes to win over evil whilst trying to remain alive and find a way back home.
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Hey Martin! Cool idea and great start to the logline, just needs to be restructured more like a logline. So something like, "When INCITING INCIDENT transports a nuclear submarine into the Viking Era, the ADJECTIVE Captain must find a way to get the crew home before their actions change history." and then maybe a little bit of info that happens in Act Two that obviously throws a wrench into this plan or establishes the antagonist.
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Thank you Nick for your feedback, it does flow beautifully.