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A team of doctors races to uncover the identity of a mad scientist and stop his army of zombies before they take over the island paradise.
SYNOPSIS:
LOGLINE: A team of doctors races to uncover the identity of a mad scientist and stop his army of zombies before they take over the island paradise.
COMPARISON: Twilight Zone, Frankenstein, General Hospital
Rich Futuristic Settings: The five-episode futuristic sci-fi thriller is set in 2036 on an imaginary tourist island paradise off the coast of South America, popular for posh beaches and annual Carnival celebrations. Classic sci-fi elements, dark fantasy, and high-tech weapons blend with Caribbean folklore and lifestyle, creating a visually stunning world of sun-kissed shores where palm trees sway and steel drums echo.
Based on Reality: The story is purely the author’s imagination, inspired by the zika virus in 2016. Zombies and robots take center stage, and good triumphs over evil.
Character-Driven: Drama and intrigue delve deep into the psychological complexities of the Antagonist, Chief of Police Bill Grady [ Master Zeeka]. Dr. Steven Sharpe, the Protagonist, kidnapped as a child by Zeeka, proves that good triumphs over evil.
Dr. Jason Stephens {Dr. Steven Sharpe] – Protagonist and Lead Character. Jason Stephens’ real name is Dr. Steven Sharpe. He is the brother of Dr. Raynor Sharpe. Grady [ Zeeka] kidnapped Steven when he was seven years old, changed his name, put him through medical school, and forced him to create a vaccine to bring dead babies back to life. When suspicion falls on him for being Master Zeeka, he breaks his engagement with Dr. Janet Jones and disappears, leaving a note to forget him. Janet marries Steven’s brother, Raynor. Steven, filled with guilt and shame, proves his innocence and real identity and reunites with his brother, Raynor. He assists the police in hunting down Zeeka, regains his job at Gosh Hospital, marries Janet’s sister, Mandy, invents many miracle cures, and becomes the hero on the island of Gosh.
Episodic Structure:
Episode 1. Dr. Raynor Sharpe sees zombies marching outside his beachfront home, and they suddenly disappear. A zombie named Number Nine goes to Gosh Hospital to warn Dr. Brown about an impending massacre by his Master, Zeeka. He says that Zeeka’s mission is revenge because, in 2016, Dr. George Brown rejected a vaccine to save unborn babies from microcephaly, a disease associated with the zika virus. Zeeka’s wife died in childbirth, and his baby also died. In February 2036, 51 killer zombies disguised as a sailor band, and controlled by a transponder by Master Zeeka, unleash weapons at a Carnival event. One hundred and twenty-five people die, seventy-five are maimed for life, and all the zombies disintegrate into ash. Police believe Number Nine died in the shoot-out. Intertwined in this episode is a love triangle between Dr. Jason Stephens, Dr. Raynor Sharpe, and Dr. Janet Jones. Raynor marries Janet.
Episode 2. Detective Jack Wildy discovers a flash drive revealing the face of the real perpetrator, Chief of Police Bill Grady. Dr. Jason Stephens gives another flash drive to Janet to deliver to Dr. Raynor Sharpe, confirming his identity as Dr. Steven Sharpe, Raynor’s brother, and about his kidnapping by Zeeka [ Grady] forty years before. Dr. Janet Jones–Sharpe, Raynor’s wife, plays a leading role in uniting Steven with his brother, Raynor, and revealing Zeeka’s identity. Police find evidence of nine flesh-eating zombies in Grady’s basement and start a manhunt for Zeeka and the nine zombies.
Episode 3. Zeeka [ Grady] abandons his zombies in the forest and goes to the home of Dr. Raynor Sharpe to find Steven Sharpe to tell him something important. Janet’s helper, Miranda, a beautiful robot, uses her taekwondo skills to capture Zeeka when she sees him holding a gun. She calls the police. They slap Grady with more than 200 charges, to which he confesses. He asks to see Steven Sharpe and tells him why he kidnapped him. He claimed to have been engaged to his mother, Margaret Sharpe [deceased], who jilted him to marry a doctor, and he thought Steven was his son. He begs Steven for forgiveness. Steven does not believe him and refuses. Grady commits suicide in prison. The funeral home gives Grady’s ashes to Steven. The police shrink zombies and demolish them with high-tech weapons found in Grady’s bag.
Episode 4. A strong wind throws down Zeeka’s urn. It falls and breaks into pieces, scattering the ashes in Steven’s study. Steven goes to clean it up, the ashes disappear, and Zeeka’s ghost appears to Steven. The ghost begs Steven for forgiveness and tells him to call a priest to have his ashes committed to the ground so he can leave the world in peace. The ghost warned Steven that he had overheard criminals planning to ambush and kill him. Steven tells the ghost to go to hell. Steven was honoured by the hospital for inventing a cure for Alzheimer's. His wife, Mandy, left the function with Raynor and Janet, who dropped her home. The criminals were waiting inside the house to kidnap Mandy, and they grabbed her. They called Steven for a million-dollar ransom. Steven faces the kidnappers empty-handed, and Zeeka’s ghost saves Steven and his wife from them. Steven forgives Zeeka. A priest called a puzzled Steven to say that he received the urn with the ashes and set a time for its burial. Ghostly! Episode 5. Number Nine is alive. Mandy's robot helper, Eve, encounters him when he goes to see the big Z monument in Steven’s backyard, under which Steven buried Zeeka’s ashes. He collapses in the backyard with an epileptic fit, and Eve alerts the Gosh hospital. Tests and records confirm he is Number Nine, he is not a zombie, and is the biological son of Bill Grady – Master Zeeka. He was misdiagnosed with microcephaly. Raynor helps Number Nine choose Nieman Grady as his legal name, and Steven cures him of his brain ailment, Craniosynostosis, with his new invention CrainX. Steven becomes the new hero in Gosh and is again honoured by the hospital for his miracle cures and inventions that replace Carnival Tourism with Medical Tourism
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This sounds exciting, Brenda Mohammed!
I like your logline, but I suggest changing "must uncover" to something like "races to uncover." I think "races to uncover" sounds more urgent.
I also think "maybe the world" doesn't sound serious enough. Maybe change it to "world."
A team of doctors races to uncover the identity of a mad scientist and stop his army of zombies before they take over the island and world.
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When an army of zombies threaten an island, a team of dedicated doctors race to stop the mad-scientist-creator's plan for world domination.
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Thanks to all of you. I appreciate your suggestions. Tasha Lewis, why a three stars. Please explain.. I need all suggestions.
By the way, that logline was suggested by Scott Dow, to whom I submitted my script.
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You're welcome, Brenda Mohammed.