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A young engineer discovers his uncle's secret activities and involuntarily joins his team on a journey across the world full of adventure and danger to solve Antikythera's strange mechanism and its operating keys.
SYNOPSIS:
"When an orphan named Aiden comes back to his apartment in Manhattan after getting an Engineering degree in the prestigious Yale University, he finds in his mail a mysterious black envelope sent by Luke, his millionaire uncle who became his protector after the death of his parents. The envelope contains a letter and a ticket to go see The Phantom of the Opera. But, once he's at the theater, a series of unexpected events will take place and change his life in a radical way. The discovery of his uncle's secret activities will involve him in great dangers and mighty adventures.
Aiden will embark on a relentless journey through different places in the world, in search of the strange Antikythera Mechanism and its keys to its functioning. But he's not alone. To find it, a team of young people like him will join Aiden on his adventure, each one with a different skill that will be essential to confront ruthless killers who count on powerful resources in their favor.
During this journey, he will also find love and his own ability to survive in extraordinary circumstances. But, mainly, he will find the guiding thread to a mystery that awaits in the past."
If Aidan has relatives then he is not an orphan. In addition, your logline says billionaire, and your synopsis says, millionaire also not sure what living in Manhattan and being a graduate from Yale University has to do with the story. If he graduated then he is not still a student. Great story premise reminds me of several adventure stories I have already seen. In addition here is a link to learn how to write killer loglines https://screencraft.org/blog/the-simple-guide-to-writing-a-logline/ Best of luck
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