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A young, inner city space fanatic wins a 'dream come true' trip on a corporate rocket to the moon only to end up battling a terrorist on board and other perilous problems. It's "Apollo 13" meets "Willy Wonka!"
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“Space-cation Land” mixes the suspense of “Apollo 13” with the wonder and humor of “Willy Wonks.” It tells the story of Manny, a young Latino kid, who has always dreamed of being an astronaut. But in an age where NASA is well beyond its glory days and space travel seems a luxury only for the elite, winning a prestigious contest is the best chance he’s got! Little does he (or the organizers) know that the nefarious North Koreans have inserted a mole into the contest by the name of Little Su. Su and her parents act as sleeper agents and, once the ship has left the earth, they hijack the experimental spaceship in the hopes of crashing it into the Space Station.
The crew attempts to regain control of the spacecraft, yet fail where Manny succeeds. Manny approaches Little Su like an individual, and not merely a puppet for her oppressive government but as a fellow immigrant. He convinces her to abandon her mission. However, back on Earth, the Department of Defense has laid the blame for the hijacking upon Manny, himself! As the ship returns to Earth, Manny finally receives the credit that he is owed, and grants his parents a path to full citizenship.
“Space-cation Land” provides the laughs of a comedy space fantasy such as “Galaxy Quest” while offering a satirical commentary on income inequality, racism and the moronic billionaire funded ‘space race’ happening right now.
This sounds like it'd be an exciting movie, Mike Bencivenga! It reminds me of movies like "Galaxy Quest" and "Mars Attacks!" I think the logline needs to be restructured though. Right now, it'll make a reader winded.
Here's a logline suggestion: "After a young, inner-city space fanatic wins a 'dream come true' trip on a corporate rocket to the moon, he battles a terrorist on board and other perilous problems in order to ___________ (stakes)."
Or if you keep your logline as it is, maybe add a comma after "moon" and add the stakes to the logline.
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