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ADAM AND THE ALIENS

ADAM AND THE ALIENS
By Nathaniel Baker

GENRE: Family
LOGLINE:

When a young boy encounters a friendly robotic alien who crash-lands in
his backyard, he is whisked off on a fantastical adventure to save the
alien's friends from peril!

SYNOPSIS:

Act 1:

An aspiring astronaut, Young Judy (8) plays in her room when she hears

her baby sister Maria (1) crying. With parents asleep, Judy brings Maria

to her room. Suddenly, a large alien, called the Red King, flies across

the night sky. Judy sees it and takes Maria outside to inspect it.

While standing on the yard, a red beam shoots down from the Red King and

pulls Maria up. Judy is unable to stop it and when the alien spaceship

takes off, Judy realizes they have taken Maria.

Nearly three decades later. A UFO crashes onto Earth outside Judy's (now

late 30s) house. Judy's 8-year-old son, Adam, sees the raising purple

smoke from the crash site but doesn't think much of it. Later that

night, Adam is woken up by a noise from the garage. He goes to

investigate when he sees a mysterious blue object in the garage. To

Adam's great surprise, the object can speak and tells Adam his name is

Rio. Scared, Adam runs away.

The next day, Adam is in the school playground when he is suddenly

pushed over by three bullies: Sam, Tom, and the ringleader Jack. The

boys steal Adam's favorite toy, Speedy, before Adam realizes what

happened. Later that day, Adam cries in his bed. Rio hears his cries and

enters the room, hoping to help Adam. After the initial shock, Adam

gathers his courage to talk to Rio and tells him about Speedy.

Act 2:

The next day, Adam and Rio track Speedy to the park. Using Rio's ability

to fly and become invisible, Adam and Rio track the bullies down to

their treehouse. Jack is shocked when Adam suddenly appears from nowhere

and loses his balance. When Jack is about to fall, Adam leaps to rescue

and saves him. Grateful Jack gives Speedy back to Adam. Adam and Rio

return home when Rio receives a distress signal from one of his missing

friends. That night, Rio and Adam look for a wifi router in Adam's

garage when a blue blob flies towards them. Adam nearly screams when Rio

recognizes it as his friend Max-e-o-e.

Rio uses the wifi router to communicate with his friends and tracks them

down to Tokyo. He and Adam fly to Japan while Max-eo-e stays home and

pretends to be Adam.

Rio and Adam track down Rio's friends -- Henry, Logan, and Miles –- to

the harbor. But they soon realize, the entire thing was a trap. Now

under the influence of a mysterious device that drains their energy. Rio

is too weak to fight. It is now up to Adam to save everyone. Adam finds

the device and deactivates it, giving the aliens their power back.

Adam and the aliens return to Adam's house while back in Tokyo, the Red

King finds out about the aliens escaping. However, his accomplice, the

Red Queen, reveals she has tracked Rio to North America.

The next day, Adam and the aliens try to repair their spaceship when

Jack appears to apologize. Jack sees the aliens and Adam convinces him

they are friendly. Things get worse when Judy comes home. Adam and Jack

try to keep Judy from finding out about the aliens but ultimately fail.

Meanwhile, Miles and Logan work on fixing the ship when they are

attacked by the Red King's army. With the Red King closing in, the

aliens realize they need everyone's help in conquering the army. Just

then, the Red Queen arrives.

Sijun Cui

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Marcos Fizzotti

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Chase Carmichael

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Chase Carmichael

It's perfectly great. The problem is Act One. How come Maria gets kidnapped by the Red Aliens and Judy has nothing in her desire to rescue her while traveling to outer space to trace them. I mean, if she had done that, then this so-called "The Red Queen" wouldn't exist. That way, you can have Judy who is now in her 30's the overprotective mom and adventurist while you can have Maria who is well a well-renowned scientist who helps Adam with his problem while encountering Rio. Maria would get freaked out that the Red Alien Army came here to kidnap her back to make her their queen after their king has passed, from there a new villain would be tougher and destructive than ever that Adam & Maria have no choice but to fight them. I mean "What If" Maria as a 1-year-old never gets abducted and becomes the Red Queen as she grows up. Think about it? It could have a lot of heart to the premise based on Adam's goal. Overall, the rest of the synopsis is solid enough. What do you think?

Michelle Rojas

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Muzafar Batyrkhodzhaev

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Muzafar Batyrkhodzhaev

Интересная и тёплая концепция с хорошим семейным вайбом. История с дружелюбным роботом и ребёнком имеет потенциал для трогательного и увлекательного приключения. При более глубокой проработке персонажей и конфликта проект может получиться очень сильным.

Jeff Rosenberg

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