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MANNEQUINS KNIVE OUT
By Fabrice Katalay
On Christmas Eve, a group of thieves break into a shopping mall under renovation and find themselves fighting for their lives against robotic mannequins.
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Hey, Fabrice. This is pretty good! You have a typo... "A" should be lower case. Besides that, one way to improve the logline is to mention the stakes. Are they fighting for their lives or just for the retail items? Good luck. This sounds like a movie I would watch!
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Donnalyn Vojta Thank you for the correction this helps me improve my logline.
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