I like it Georgette but the only thing it's missing is the stakes for the protagonist. What happens if this man doesn't get his dog to a loving home? Are the celestial rules or sarcastic angel putting up a wall to his goals? Why is the man grieving if he is dead? I think it sounds like a very cool story and if you beef up the logline a little more it will peak a lot of interest. Good luck.

Is he allowed to go help the dog find a good home amid various potential adopters, and the Angel tries to stop him, hence he will go to hell if he fails? A hell which is displayed vividly to him as everything he hates? He has to fail so that no precedent is set which would create heavenly anarchy and chaos? That sounds like a highly comic idea.

Your log lines gives the impression because the man was grieving that is why he get's the right to refuse entry to heaven. Secondly why an angel is antagonist? It is the most common antagonist in such series so nothing creative.

Love the concept Georgette Skolnick think it’s just a long winded log line that falls slightly flat , there’s no sense of urgency / stakes there . Log lines can be really tricky ( god knows I spent an entire afternoon on mine and it’s still not there ). I think it comes down to the essence of the story and how well you know it. Is the script written yet ? I made the mistake of writing the logline before the script .

Hi Marie, the script was easier to write than the logline. I re-wrote it again two more times. What do you think of the new ones? Are either of these better? Which do you prefer? Thanks for your help.