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Wilmer Villanueva
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CONFRONTATION VOL. 1
By Wilmer Villanueva

GENRE: Science Fiction, Action

LOGLINE: Humanity arrives at Proxima Centauri on a space journey to replace Earth and start a new life. Years later another group of humans arrive but are not well received, causing a confrontation between them.

SYNOPSIS:

In the 28th century, Earth is devastated by cataclysms that force humanity to seek a new home. Only a fraction of the population manages to escape on a dozen ships bound for the Proxima Centauri system. After two centuries of travel, the survivors arrive on the planet Centauri, a habitable world where, under the leadership of Sebastian Cooper and a new system of government, they begin to rebuild civilization. But the apparent stability is threatened: a local virus begins to decimate the population, and in the midst of the crisis, the colonists discover that another ship from Earth is approaching the planet. Led by brilliant scientist Ryo Matsui and former police officer Jonathan Díaz, the newcomers hope to integrate. However, not being accepted as part of the colony, they decide to impose their presence by force. What was supposed to be a reunion between survivors turns into a battle for control of a new world. With humanity divided and divided, the real question is whether Centauri will be a rebirth… or the setting for the final confrontation.

Chanel Ashley

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7 years ago

Wilmer, I admire the fact you have a body of work, it's quite obvious English is not your first language and your writing suffers because of this - I can see you are passionate and dedicated to the craft, but may I make a few observations - I'm a great believer in "economy of words" and "less is more", throw in "show, not tell" - I suggest you have too much dialogue, you explain too much, you need to dilute the dialogue - also, the build-up isn't very strong, by that I mean the dramatic tension is too timid, not enough to engage the audience - this is only an opinion and you will probably disagree, but that is my advise to you - keep writing, I believe you have the talent, but not the execution at this point - good luck my friend, cheers.

Wilmer Villanueva

7 years ago

Hello Chanel Ashley, thanks for your comments. I agree with your comments. And it is true that English did not dominate very well. I think I made a great effort to translate my script from Spanish to English. I will take your opinions into account to improve. Thank you and that you are well.