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DIRTY BLACK SHEETS ON A DEAD TREE
By Joseph Ulloa
When Einstein's note is stolen, four thieves escape into cartel Mexico to sell their loot and come out alive.
SYNOPSIS:
A heist goes terribly wrong, As four fugitives try to sell Einstien's note in the hot Mexican desert.
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Hey Joseph. This is a tagline, not a logline. (like Alien: In space no one can hear you scream.) Your logline needs to express what the story is about. You've given us setting and a vague notion of the conflict, but who is the central character, what do they want, and is there anyone directly standing in their way, stopping them from getting it? Also: some focus on stakes would be ideal. If you'd like some further help with your logline, do by all means message me directly. Either here or via www.philmscribe.com
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