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THE TATTERED BOOK - CASSI
By Heidi Schussman
A shy introverted woman buys a book about a handsome, Italian detective who seems to see her while she reads the book. As the detective begins to fall in love with her, she must choose between being pulled into a fictitious world or throwing away the book... and throwing away her chance at love. (The Lakehouse meets Just Like Heaven)
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Synopsis: While on a morning run, Cassi stops at a garage sale and buys a tattered detective novel. As soon as Cassi starts reading the book, her carefully ordered life begins to unravel; She dreams about the story, about what hasn’t happened yet, and the main character seems to see her as she reads. Shy by nature, Cassi attempts to talk to him in her dreams but, on every attempt, she wakes up. Not knowing who she can trust with her bizarre secret, she confides in one of her elderly physical therapy patients who believes her and provides comical advice.
Detective Marco Marino is working an intricate and dangerous case in Florence, Italy. The Scutari mob has threatened another business in Florence. Trained in the United States, he uses his extensive knowledge of mob families to corner this ancient family. As he works the case a mysterious woman keeps appearing and disappearing like a phantom. At first, he’s unnerved by this constant distraction from his work, until he realizes she is trying to help him solve the case. If only she could speak! When he takes her into his arms for a fleeting kiss, he knows she’s real. This is a mystery he must solve.
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Thanks Marco, Eon, Tasha, Nelda, and Arthur for taking the time to rate my logline.
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Wayne, thanks for your help and guidance in getting this logline honed down.
Nathanial, thanks for the fives stars! I really appreciate it.
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I love both films, The Lake House and Just Like Heaven. It would be lovely to see how The Tattered Book manages to keep audiences guessing until that big third-act revelation. All the best.
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Thanks Leonidas for the 5*! I had this one professionally critiqued and the reader said it kept him guessing. ;)
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Heidi Schussman Heidi, this is a very engaging and emotionally appealing concept with a strong romantic-fantasy hook. The idea of a character falling in love across the boundary of fiction and reality is both imaginative and accessible, and the comparison to The Lakehouse and Just Like Heaven positions it well commercially.
The logline is clear and compelling, with a strong central dilemma that creates immediate emotional stakes. The concept of choosing between reality and a fantastical love is especially effective.
The synopsis builds the dual worlds nicely, and the interplay between Cassi and Marco is intriguing. The gradual shift from curiosity to emotional connection works well, and the mystery element adds an extra layer of tension. The inclusion of the elderly patient is a nice touch that brings warmth and levity.
Tightening a few moments and clarifying how the worlds connect at a deeper level could make the narrative even stronger, but overall this is a very marketable and heartfelt concept with strong audience appeal.