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Seeking to put the murders of local townspeople and travelers to rest, the Berkshire police must find a way to end the bloody reign of a vicious, cruel bloodthirsty beast which stalks the halls of England's most haunted ruin and seeks to add their heads to its trophy case.
SYNOPSIS:
Robert Ripley and two friends brave the haunted halls of Berkshire Castle, whereupon they are beset by the castle's guardian. They escape and live to tell the tale, only several townspeople aren't so lucky. The police become involved when a local heir disappears and his decapitated corpse is found on the castle property. During their investigation, they discover the horrors and legends of the castle are true, and they themselves are in danger and must escape before it is too late.
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Nice, this could be fun. I would say that your synopsis has a much more interesting story than the logline. The logline by itself sounds like a rather straightforward (but cool) supernatural slasher. But your synopsis has more depth with the police investigation. Maybe there is a way to convey more of this in the logline?
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Peter makes a good point. Just a little more detail takes it over the top!
Gene is there a script I can read?
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