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After a circus visit, a teenage girl and her siblings are trapped in their home by a killer who stages the night as a performance, forcing her to defy his script to survive.
SYNOPSIS:
Seventeen-year-old Paige Bishop reluctantly takes her younger siblings to a failing traveling circus, confronting a lifelong fear of clowns—only to draw the attention of Tulips, a disturbingly cheerful performer who sees the world as a stage.
That night, Tulips follows them home and traps them inside, cutting off communication and turning their house into the setting for his twisted “show.” As he toys with them—manipulating space, expectations, and fear with playful precision—Paige struggles to keep her siblings alive while facing a killer who is always smiling, always in control, and fully aware of what he’s doing.
When help arrives too late and the night spirals into violence, Paige realizes survival depends on refusing to play her assigned role—confronting Tulips on her own terms before his final act begins.
A contained, performance-driven horror thriller centered on a uniquely theatrical antagonist.
This Concept Is Strong But Your Villain Can Be Way More Dangerous
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Have you read the script?
Not yet I wanted to understand your intent first.
From the logline though, the concept is strong, especially the performance angle with Tulips. Execution will be key.
If you’re open, I can take a look and give focused notes on what’s working and where it can hit harder.
Appreciate it, but I’m all set on notes right now. Thanks.
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Got it, totally fair.
If you ever want a second set of eyes on tension or Tulips, I’m happy to help.
Really solid concept wish you the best with it.
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