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They say on a night when the moon if full, you can often see the water ruffle as Champ moves about the lake. You may even hear him grunting out his sad and lonely cries in the silence of the night, as if he is searching for someone, and this is where the story begins, the mythical magical tale of an orphan boy named Charlie, and Lake Champlain’s legendary sea serpent Champ.
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