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FREETOWN
By Ben Basso

GENRE: Sci-fi, Crime
LOGLINE:

A small town detective is forced into an inconceivable mystery when a severed hand, genetically identical to his, appears next to the headless body of a boy. When the case leads back to his own missing son, he’s introduced to a world of parallel universes in which he may be able to save his family and the world.

SYNOPSIS:

Freetown, Massachusetts.

To some, it’s the most haunted and strange city in America. Stories about its forest range from

murderous satanic cults to then Governor Ronald Reagan encountering a U.F.O.

It’s full of eerie myths and legends due to its powerful Native American presence and culture. It’s

also part of “The Bridgewater Triangle”, a group of cities that are the core of American paranormal

phenomena.

It’s also an actual real town in the United States.

“Freetown” takes all the elements that make the real town so fascinating and weaves them into the

intriguing and suspenseful story of Detective Blake Ingram, a troubled man who discovers that the

headless body of a teen and the severed hand of a recent murder case lead straight back to his own

missing son and throw him head first into a paranormal world of all possibilities.

He’s a man that believes things just randomly happen, as opposed to being dictated by fate or for a

reason, but deep inside he’s just trying to bury his feelings of guilt for his son’s disappearance.

As an absolute non-believer, Blake will go down a trail that will challenge his perceptions of the

world he thinks he knows so well and face him off with powerful and dangerous enemies on the

way like The Keeper, an old man with an astonishing amount of knowledge about the supernatural

and the will to do whatever it takes to accomplish his mission to which Blake poses a threat to. And

Red Mask, a faithful soldier of The Keeper who wears a frightening red and black metal mask that

hides a deep, dark secret.

With the help of his trusty partner, Detective Alexa Boon, an older but badass woman, Blake will

learn to open his mind to the unknown, make sacrifices for those he loves the most, and wage war

on the people who are trying to destroy his family, all while trying to maintain his sanity and

allegiances as he learns more of The Keeper’s mission and is tempted to turn to his dark side in a

shocking and revealing twist.

Jeff Reyes

I love the father-missing son mystery. And you really capture the agony of your lead character in the story. But for the logline, I think the second half of the last sentence should lead back to the missing son since based on your synopsis, that is your lead's main conflict. It's a hunt for his son. That's the only way he'll be pushed to start to believe in the supernatural. And you did so well milking that in your logline. It just so happened that a parallel universe is involved.

"...he’s introduced to a world of parallel universes which [may lead him to his son's whereabouts.]" Something like that.

I would also add something that hints at your lead about being a non-believer in the logline. That'll set up the conflict of his disbelief to what's suddenly in front of him (re: a parallel universe).

Andrea Thompson

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Ben Basso

Thank you very much for the review, Jeff. It's quite helpful. Best of luck!

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