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After discovering a fallen soldier’s ashes in a used car, a weary mechanic travels across the country to return them to the parents, embarking on a journey that forces him to confront his ghosts and forgotten capacity for love.
SYNOPSIS:
When Frank Carlson, a washed-up mechanic who’s just lost his job and marriage, buys a
used Firebird for parts, he discovers a soldier’s urn hidden under the dashboard. With nothing left to
lose, Frank sets out to return the ashes to the young man’s parents across the country. Along the way,
he picks up a stray dog, a roadside priest, and his own long-buried guilt. Through motels, truck stops,
and empty highways, Frank’s dry wit masks a man running from himself — until the voices of the dead,
the living, and one unforgettable encounter with the soldier’s grieving family force him to face what
broke inside him long before the journey began.
A soulful, darkly funny redemption story in the spirit of The Straight Story and Peanut Butter Falcon,
Goodbye, Saint Christopher transforms a simple road trip into a pilgrimage of forgiveness. This is a
character-driven, low-budget feature built for an A-list actor in his fifties or sixties — a role that
demands humor, grit, and vulnerability. With universal themes of loss, faith, and second chances, the
script balances blue-collar Americana with spiritual undertones, delivering a final image that’s poetic,
cathartic, and unforgettable.
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Great idea for a movie and title, Joseph Murkijanian! I’m looking forward to watching Good Bye Saint Christopher!
I suggest tightening up your logline. It’s 50 words. Try to keep your logline to 35 words or less. Long loglines can make producers, directors, etc. pass on a project.
Here’s a logline suggestion: After discovering a fallen soldier’s ashes in a used car, a weary mechanic travels across the country to return them to the parents, embarking on a journey that forces him to confront his ghosts and forgotten capacity for love.
Or this: After discovering a fallen soldier’s ashes in a used car, a mechanic who lost his job and marriage travels across the country to return them to the parents, embarking on a journey that forces him to confront his ghosts and forgotten capacity for love.
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Thank you, Maurice, for your review. I changed the Logline using your suggestion.
You're welcome, @Joseph.
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