Logline is fine, sis, though look at the Stranger Things Pitch Bible under the "Story" section. This is what a synopsis should look like: http://www.zen134237.zen.co.uk/Stranger_Things/Stranger_Things_-_Bible.pdf

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Juno Dante Night Okie day thanks for the tip.

Susan Mcgregor/ Aka Susan Ruggiero Thanks!

No problem. Just trying to help out. Pitching scripts is the worst part!

Hi Sarahfina! So good start, but you can structure this better as well as be more specific. When you say, "but no one knows why." it makes me think the voice actor isn't the protagonist of the story. But also I feel like you answer the question in the logline by saying his show was cancelled, which is a bit confusing. Is not knowing why a big driving force of the plot? Are the characters desperately scrambling to figure it out? If not, then don't worry about it. If it's meant to tease Jodi's arc because it's some sort of twist, and Jodi is your protagonist, then leave it out and instead tell us the journey he's going on because as of right now, I don't know what this story will be about. I know the setup, but not anything regarding where it's headed. So something like, "A former voice actor who has taken a vow of silence must DO SOMETHING BEFORE SOMETHING HAPPENS." kind of thing.

Nick Assunto Thanks so much, your tips are very helpful! (Apologies for the late reply.)