I like the story, Marc Isaacs. Is there a way to add the stakes to the logline (example: he needs money, so the money from the product will help)? That's the only part I see that's missing.

I like the concept as well - instantly takes me back to some epic dodge ball action. I agree that there is a stakes element missing; and I also think it can be worded a bit differently to flow better, like if you were talking to a friend about the plot, or had a minute or less to tell someone. "In 1970, a major toy manufacturer introduces a new ball for kids for indoor use. But when a former high school shop teacher claims the idea came from a classroom project he developed two years before, blah blah blah." The "blah blah blah" would be the stakes.

Maurice Vaughan, there is definitely a way to add stakes. I think that's what taking a fictional approach to this true story will open up for me. Thanks so much for the feedback.

Greg Dorchak, thanks for the feedback. I thought about starting the story sooner when the teacher is actually developing the idea. That could be a place to introduce stakes as well. I like the structure of making the stakes come at the end of the logline, too.

Maurice Vaughan, does this version address what you felt was missing before?