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THE ART OF EATING ICE CREAM
By Deen Ferrell
An international star with a 15-year-old secret meets a culinary genius determined to create the perfect dessert and they discover the painful, sometimes hilarious, truth that love doesn't always follow a recipe...
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Kelsie McDunn's family owns the largest energy consortium in the British Isles, but her passion is elsewhere. She loves food--more precisely, the creation of wonderfully wild and flavorful frozen desserts. When Isla, a precocious fifteen-year-old in Goth regalia, enters her shop on a quiet street in Old Town, Edinburgh, Kelsie's world spins toward chaos. Isla wants to hire Kelsie to help her father, a man who she fears is "lapsing" into middle age. With Kelsie's imaginative flair and good looks, she's sure Kelsie will rekindle a youthful vigor in her father. Kelsie, intrigued by the girl, but not the proposal, agrees at length to meet the man, only to find he is none other than Alec Meikle, the international star of the long-running romance-adventure, "Sailor and Commander." Alec presses her to play along with Isla, offering to pay her double if she will hold up the charade for a few dates. He hopes Kelsie can become a confidant and friend to Isla, who he fears is become isolated and neglected as a result of his fame. The plan backfires when Alec finds himself intrigued by Kelsie's poise and passion. As their romance blossoms, Isla pulls into herself, becoming despondent and hinting at a secret she can't let go. It pulls her toward a terrifying memory--one she thought she had banished long ago. Kelsie juggles her growing feelings for Alec and her concern for Isla. In a raging sea, at the height of a seasonal storm, she is at last brought to face the full force of Isla's pain. Putting her own life at risk, she is determined to keep the girl from succumbing. She relies on what she knows best; ingredients make the recipe. What ingredient is needed to bring Alec and Isla together? What strength can bridge between the heat of firing passion and the chill of palatable pain? Flavor is what's left when heat and chill compel ingredients to...connect.
THE ART OF EATING ICE CREAM
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That's a catchy title, Deen Ferrell! "15-year-old secret" is intriguing.
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The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion).
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