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CHRONICLES OF A BROKEN PATH

CHRONICLES OF A BROKEN PATH
By Benjamin II

GENRE: Fantasy
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“A wayward monk, haunted by visions of death and fiery desolation, must unite six unlikely heroes—The Scholar, The Flame, The Crone, The Dagger, The Damsel, and The Dog—to defeat a Rising Tyrant blessed by dark forces, before his war consumes the world.”

SYNOPSIS:

A warrior monk receives a vision of fire, death and violence during meditation. He must find 6 champions in order to stop the war from his vision. The Scholar, The Flame, The Crone, The Dagger, The Damsel and The Dog. He befriends a barbarian during his travels. Meanwhile, far to the north, a horde of barbarians are crushing kingdom after kingdom and threaten the entire continent with bloody revolution. Worst of all, many fighters from all over believe in this tyrant's mission and flock to his banner. They believe him to be a prophet. The remaining Lords are forced to band together but will The Alliance of nobles hold in the face of the retribution coming their way? Can these two exiles find the rest of the missing warriors in time? Even if they can, will they be enough stand against this Tyrant and his growing army?

Robyn Henderson

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Abhijeet Aade

Benjamin II This has a classic epic fantasy feel with strong stakes and a clear quest structure.

The “six champions” idea is compelling it gives the story a built-in journey and character variety, which could be a big strength if each one feels distinct and necessary.

The main thing I’d suggest is adding a unique twist to help it stand out, since the “chosen group vs rising tyrant” setup is familiar. Maybe something specific about the monk’s visions or the cost of assembling the team.

Overall, solid foundation with good scope just needs a sharper hook to feel fresh.

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