This sounds like a cool story, very mysterious. And it has a nice theme going for it. As a logline, it's too long. It reads more like a pitch or synopsis. Try being more specific and forgetting that it's a mystery. Instead, give away the best part first. I wanted to know where exactly in the Orient is this? China? Who is the strange figure? Is this the antagonist? You hint that Daniel is somehow feeling guilty for his wife's death - why? Try this simple formula: a HERO pursues a GOAL while ovecoming OBSTACLES and an ATAGONIST. But it sounds like an interesting world and one we have't seen too much of before.

Thanks. Had feedback on the full script recently and will start preparing the 2nd draft soon.