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HOME BY THE SEA
By Meghann Mustico
After finishing a home improvement project, an elderly woman request’s the three men to care for her mansion in south Florida. When they arrive to the mansion that’s where thing’s take turn for the worst…
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Similar to The Craft and The Hangover...
When a customer offers a reward too good to be true, for three blue collar men, it was. Home By The Sea is a screenplay that deals with a too good to be true situation to fighting for their lives.
HOME BY THE SEA
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Hi Meghann, this logline could use some polishing. Try to get it to one line, and try to be concise and specific with your language. This formula helps a lot: When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE],or else [STAKES].
Thank you for the suggestion. Do you have a particular website you could suggest?
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Yes Stage32.com is pretty great :) we have webinars under the education tab, and services to help out under the script services tab like the logline review.
I'm still learning Stage 32. Thank you for your suggestion. I look forward to hopefully working with you in the future.