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DIAMOND ALLEY
By Czerny Lee Miller
The Second Coming, World's End and mankind's unconscious inducement of Revelation.
SYNOPSIS:
Campaigning for senator, Marcus Julianno is shot by an assassin. En route to the hospital in an ambulance, he tells a Reporter how he met a Messiah in 1998... who informs him of the world's end.
DIAMOND ALLEY
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Hi Czerny - sounds incredibly interesting but the logline needs work. There's no protagonist, inciting incident, plot or stakes in your logline. Here's a template I use if this helps. “After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).” Hope this helps!
Many thanks!!
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