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What would you feel if a brilliant idea, hidden deep within your mind, suddenly appeared one day realized by someone else? The first sentence echoing in your head would be: 'That was my idea!' That was exactly what the company CollectiWorks did to people. But how?
SYNOPSIS:
INTRODUCTION: The Thief Inside the Mind
David Pearce, a former chemistry teacher, becomes obsessed with a singular idea after losing his family during the pandemic: a portable device capable of instantly detecting harmful airborne particles. Keeping this concept solely inside his mind, David is shocked when he turns on the TV one day to see his exact idea flawlessly manufactured and sold by a giant corporation called CollectiWorks. As days pass, David discovers he is not alone; as CollectiWorks' discoveries grow, so do its victims, and their paths inevitably cross! A writer’s unwritten novel, an architect’s undrawn project, and an engineer’s dream technology have all been stolen in the same impossible way.
DEVELOPMENT: An Empire Built on Blood
Behind this mass theft lies a series of "Collective Thought Experiments" conducted by an idealist team of scientists: When people focus on goals they are passionately attached to, an extraordinary synchronization and metabolic activity occur within the relevant neural networks of the brain.
When the team invents a radar system capable of translating this energy into readable data, a greedy scientist with minimal contribution to the breakthrough realizes the limitlessness of its power. When the true inventors argue that using it would be unethical and demand to halt the project, his blind ambition takes over, and he murders all his colleagues—including the lead genius. Upon this blood-soaked theft, he builds the CollectiWorks empire.
Using advanced artificial intelligence, the company analyzes raw thoughts, extracts production roadmaps, and instantly transitions them into mass manufacturing. As David and the group of victims get closer to the truth, the company launches a ruthless hunt to eliminate them before they endanger its massive government contracts.
CONCLUSION: The Architect Brought Down by His Own Weapon
The group’s relentless struggle reaches its climax when they successfully expose the bloody truth behind the company to the world. By court order, the killer scientist’s mind is hooked up to his own mind-radar invention. The very system he used to exploit humanity for years now extracts the murders and dark secrets buried within his own subconscious, leading to his conviction.
However, the mind-radar technology itself is seized by the state. Hidden from the public and classified as a top-secret government asset, the system continues to cast its invisible shadow over the privacy of human thought.
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This one is similar to the other one I just commented long on. I can see where you're going with your thoughts and this one does not feel as original as the other one did but I can definitely see a lot of conspiracy theorists at work here.
This is so weird because I just got a notification about a voice message. I checked my voicemail and there were at least 4 identical messages. 1984. 2001. 2026. It's happening. But honestly, let's not go too far in reacting. Your other story showed how one could simply turn it off by refusing to be sucked into it, though easier said than done. I believe we can be strong inside but the pull of "the deep state" can be frightening.
Marc Ginsburg Your feedback has been very informative for me, thank you.
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A lesson of having a taste of their own Karma. Wonderful spiritual science fiction. So what I personally understand the main plot twist here is all these people The writer, David, The architect have taken up the test when they invented it and the other scientists were alive? Correct?
Harish Harish Chidambaram Scientists make an extraordinary discovery during a collective thought experiment. An ambitious member of the team suggests they could make a lot of money from it. However, the other scientists find this idea unethical and want to destroy the discovery, arguing it won't benefit humanity. The ambitious man refuses and kills all his teammates, beginning to use the method they discovered: stealing brilliant ideas from people's minds. This is how he gets rich. In short, the other scientists were no longer alive when David, the architect, and the other victims' ideas were stolen.
Ok So all these victims were part of the collective thought experiment, If I am understanding this correctly?
Harish Harish Chidambaram Yes, the deceased scientists were the ones who discovered the system. The other victims are those whose ideas were stolen due to the system's mind-reading techniques.
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