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ERASURE
By Anton Duzenko

GENRE: Science Fiction, Drama
LOGLINE:

A disciplined widow, her zealot sister, and a pregnant Irish maid hold a dying Shenandoah plantation through the Civil War's last winter, sheltering a Black fugitive — until the night the men come home, bringing the war with them.

SYNOPSIS:

Late 1864. Three women hold the Hargrove estate together through the war's collapse: Cordelia, the widow-in-all-but-name running the books; her sister Beatrice, whose husband has stopped writing from camp; and Nora, the Irish maid whose own private's pay packet feeds the table. One sleet-bound night a Black traveller named Elias Walker knocks at the door with papers from a dead master and asks for shelter. Cordelia bolts him in the smokehouse. By morning the household has noticed his hands are too soft, his accent wrong, and a Confederate bounty for fugitive Yankee operatives still hangs at the post-office wall. They keep him anyway — through a long winter that ends when their men come home from the war.

Leonardo Ramirez

This sounds like a great premise Anton Duzenko. I would consider adding a one-word description of the three women so that we get a sense of who they are. Then I would add a goal and what the stakes are if they don't achieve that goal. What's mostly described now is the setting. We'd love to know the goal of the protagonists.

Anton Duzenko

Leonardo Ramirez Thanks for your kind words. I slightly re-worded logline. The story itself is more about endurance than goals.

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