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QUEEN OF PENTACLES
By Michelle Rojas
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Queen of Pentacles follows Cleo, a gifted Brooklyn tarot reader whose visions begin predicting her own kidnapping by a rising cartel boss. When strangers start watching her and her readings turn dangerously specific, she realizes her fate is no longer symbolic — it’s imminent. With the help of NYPD officer Ana Vega, Cleo is pulled into a hidden criminal network fueled by corruption and betrayal. As cartel enforcer Pequeño closes in under orders from Don Bolívar, the two women are forced into a race across Brooklyn and the Bronx to stay alive. Blending intuition, street smarts, and emotional resilience, Queen of Pentacles is a gritty crime thriller about destiny, survival, and refusing to be erased.
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Michelle Rojas This is a really strong, high-concept hook foreseeing your own kidnapping is instantly compelling.
The blend of tarot intuition with a grounded crime world gives it a fresh edge, especially if the visions feel both helpful and unreliable.
One suggestion: you could sharpen the logline slightly by focusing more on Cleo’s core dilemma trusting her visions vs. trying to outsmart them. That tension feels like the heart of the story.
Overall, this feels very marketable and character-driven with a clear tone.
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Wow!! Seeing what you mean…. I’m going to sharpen the logline. Thanks soooooooo much for the feedback! I hope this reaches the right eyes!!
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Definitely a compelling (and marketable) concept. I also feature the tarot in one of my scripts. Best of luck with this, Michelle! :-)
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The project skillfully blends elements of mysticism and crime drama, building intrigue around themes of fate and choice. The conflict is established from the very beginning, and the narrative develops through increasing pressure and tension. The protagonist is strong and well-suited to the genre. The project demonstrates strong potential for visual storytelling.
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Hopefully this reaches the right eyes
Wow! What an honor! Thank you so much!
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